Responding to the problem which is an increasing proportion of people having abnormal weight, several people try to give their ideas to solve the problem by incorporating sport education into their children’s school system more than a usual. In my opinion, I totally agree with the constructive concept that it can be one of the best solution to prevent and reduce the trend of having excessive weight leading to obesity problem and complication.
First of all, tackling a health issue related to obese people tend to need a long-term approach and applying more exercise programs in school can make a positive impact to children’s daily habits from the early age. Having an exercise more than once in a week probably become too burdening regulation for very young people in the beginning. However, if it truly can be implemented in every single school, sooner or later it will be school’s standard activities and children will be used to the program. This will make children fitter and healthier everyday leading to children’s healthy body and preventing them from harmful health issues in their elderly age.
Secondly, the consideration of involving sport education in school syllabus can be a good strategy in encouraging currently modern people having unhealthy lifestyle to bring them back t their healthy life. Recently, populating having tight schedules are exposured by bad habits of consuming bad diet such as instant food or ready-to-eat food and less exercises. Slowly, it can spread to all range of ages in their family including their children. By creating a new curriculum of implementing more sport lesson in it, children will be more interested in doing sport and bring their curiosity at home. Further, children will ask their family (mother and father or other family members) to visit sport area more often and indirectly their parent and family will get involved in practicing their children’s regular sport. Although it will take more time to achieve the intended purpose, but it remains being a good plan in contributing to health problem prevention.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun exercises is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...s instant food or ready-to-eat food and less exercises. Slowly, it can spread to all...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, as to, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23511904762 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90583356256 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580357142857 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.1275770415 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.583333333 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133381573871 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05618230946 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449863202447 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105798670192 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325868938603 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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