The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The given diagram illustrates the information about amendments which has been done at Queen Mary Hospital and it indicates its development in three varied years 1960,1980 and 2000.

It is crystal clear that in 1960, the hospital was built near to a main road and close to the shopping centre.A large area behind the hospital was kept for a car park ,while the section behind the shopping centre was farmland.Further more,In 1980,except hospital and Car park ,the shopping center had been demolished in order to make a two additional buildings such as Cancer centre as well as Pharmacy and the farmland area was converted into a Nursing school.In 2000,the hospital building was remained constant but the nursing school zone was covered for extending the area of cancer centre and the old car park was divided in two parts for fabricating a new nursing school.

Overall,it can be clearly notified that the variations took place in hospital time to time during different years.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, well, while, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 821.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06790123457 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69314840211 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623456790123 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 236.7 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 22.4926829268 240% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 252.699206348 43.030603864 587% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 273.666666667 112.824112599 243% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.0 22.9334400587 235% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.6666666667 5.23603664747 261% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144533838987 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131762104654 0.103423049105 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814464525352 0.0843802449381 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131762104654 0.15604864568 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814464525352 0.0819641961636 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.4 13.2329268293 222% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 25.13 61.2550243902 41% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 10.3012195122 225% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.06136585366 124% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 11.4329268293 254% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.9970731707 215% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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