Which would you choose between the house and the business when you have enough money to purchase? People express different opinions on this. Personally, I choose the business because of the following reasons.
First, although the business have risk to go loss, it can be productive when we conduct properly. A successful businessman always takes the risk and makes his life better. For example, my uncle is a businessman who purchased enough money in a hotel. In that hotel, initially, no tourists did not come because of the political instability. But, when Nepal gain stability and uncle manage the hotel properly then, the hotel acquires a fruitful business. Now, he has own private car, apartments- the excellent lifestyle. However, my father bought a house and we sold the house when my father became ill. Moreover, my uncle expends the profit of the hotel in another hotel. Thus, we should spend enough money in the business.
Next, the business is helpful for other people by providing the job opportunity. A Job is a part and parcel for every ordinary people. For instance, I have a cow farm, in which nearly 50 people work. These people earn the necessary money. They deify me as a god. On contrary, my brother purchased the same money on a house and he is not a social person because he spends all most all day alone in his house. In addition, I spend the time with my employee on the cow farm. The days go with entertainment not boring. Hence, we should spend the money in business in the context of society’s benefit.
At last, the house can damage the agriculture lands, as well as we cannot improve our living condition. For example, in the Kathmandu city, people spend their money to buy a house. The house destroys all the lands even we cannot plant a tree. Foreigners think that Kathmandu is the bad place for living because of the pollution, the randomness of the houses. However, in early, Kathmandu was the most beautiful city in the world. All the people knew that Kathmandu is a city of temples. All the beauty has damaged by purchasing in the house, not in business. When people spend money in business, surely the beauty of Kathmandu can be seen forever. Therefore, people should be spent the money in the business.
In summation, I spend the money on business because it is productive, benefits the social and do not damage the nature or environment of our cities or community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77565632458 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62315816433 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484486873508 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9369043417 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.5483870968 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5161290323 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03225806452 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198413881657 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521283369338 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0942025331664 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130917033429 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115422258635 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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