The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

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The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The couple of pie-charts illustrates about how the online purchase of four merchandise for a retail sector in New Zealand changed in 2013 as compared to 2003.

The travel was the major sector to be sold through internet in 2003 comprising 36% of total sales followed by slightly less than a quarter of online clothing sales. The proportion of books and film/music accounts for almost similar purchase just with the difference of 2% i.e. 19% of the formar and 21% of the latter products were sold by using internet services.

The trend was changed in all four items after 10 years. The online buying of film/music rose by 12% in 2013, similarly the online books purchase too boomed to 22%. However, the sales of travel and clothing reduced to 29% and 16% respectively in year 2013.

To sum up, the online purchase of chlothes and travel showed a downfall by the period of 10 yeae whereas, rest of the two commodities represented a slight boost

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...han a quarter of online clothing sales. The proportion of books and film/music acco...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ere sold by using internet services. The trend was changed in all four items aft...
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Line 5, column 57, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...anged in all four items after 10 years. The online buying of film/music rose by 12%...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, similarly, so, whereas, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7696969697 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56886779075 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3887741522 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.428571429 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308552588448 0.215688989381 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126860740193 0.103423049105 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138214802733 0.0843802449381 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188393851495 0.15604864568 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151624861262 0.0819641961636 185% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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