SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The author has concluded that Supercorp has made the best decision by moving its headquartes to Corporateville from Middlesburg which was its earlier headquarters based on number of factors like surge in the number of homeowners, its uraban locality and lower taxes. This argument is not convincing.
First of all one of the reason the auther has give to move the headquarter is increase in number of homeowners in Corporateville. The author has assumed that superior place is inundated with lots of houses or buildings. Well increased buildings and population are not a factor for being a superior place to live. it will make the area even more congested and polluted
The author has rejected the Middlesburg due to its urban locality and the employee survey. Now a days more business are thriving in uraban location. Middlesburg being a urban area provides plethora of facility for doing business. It can increase its clientbase by being in the urban area. Employee survey may not have taken all the employees of SuperCorp into account. Only the employee who belongs to rural area may have participated in the survey.
The author has also given lower taxes as one of the reason to move its headquartes to Corporateville. he has not specified exactly to how much extent the tax is reduced. Whether the difrrence in the taxes is miniscule or huge. Obviously being in the urban area Middlesburg demands more taxes but it may provides lot of benefits like transporation, 24 hours electricity supply, workforce and many more.
In Conclusion SuperCorp shoould not have move its headquarters to Corporateville. By shifting it's headquarters it may get deprived of all the facilties that corporation in the urban area is enjoyoing.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The author has concluded that Supercorp has made the best decision by moving its headquartes to Corporateville from Middlesburg which was its earlier headquarters based on number of factors like surge in the number of homeowners, its uraban locality and lower taxes.
Error: headquartes Suggestion: headquarter
Error: uraban Suggestion: urban
Sentence: First of all one of the reason the auther has give to move the headquarter is increase in number of homeowners in Corporateville.
Error: auther Suggestion: author
Sentence: Now a days more business are thriving in uraban location.
Error: uraban Suggestion: urban
Sentence: It can increase its clientbase by being in the urban area.
Error: clientbase Suggestion: clients
Sentence: The author has also given lower taxes as one of the reason to move its headquartes to Corporateville. he has not specified exactly to how much extent the tax is reduced.
Error: headquartes Suggestion: headquarter
Sentence: Whether the difrrence in the taxes is miniscule or huge.
Error: miniscule Suggestion: minuscule
Error: difrrence Suggestion: difference
Sentence: Obviously being in the urban area Middlesburg demands more taxes but it may provides lot of benefits like transporation, 24 hours electricity supply, workforce and many more.
Error: transporation Suggestion: transportation
Error: workforce Suggestion: workhorse
Sentence: In Conclusion SuperCorp shoould not have move its headquarters to Corporateville.
Error: shoould Suggestion: should
Sentence: By shifting it's headquarters it may get deprived of all the facilties that corporation in the urban area is enjoyoing.
Error: enjoyoing Suggestion: enjoying
Error: facilties Suggestion: facilities
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 285 350
No. of Characters: 1417 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.109 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.972 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.921 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 95 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.382 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.572 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the reason the auther has give to move the headquarter is increase in number of homeowners in ...
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Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...tor for being a superior place to live. it will make the area even more congested ...
^^
Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he area even more congested and polluted The author has rejected the Middlesburg ...
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Line 5, column 92, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
...urban locality and the employee survey. Now a days more business are thriving in uraban lo...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...n locality and the employee survey. Now a days more business are thriving in uraban lo...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 168, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...g in uraban location. Middlesburg being a urban area provides plethora of facilit...
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Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...move its headquartes to Corporateville. he has not specified exactly to how much e...
^^
Line 10, column 42, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'moved'.
Suggestion: moved
...n Conclusion SuperCorp shoould not have move its headquarters to Corporateville. By ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, well, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 285.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10175438596 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00792837645 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508771929825 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.0393295198 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5294117647 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7647058824 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233633321465 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708244155449 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819432955688 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144663390375 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751342990219 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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