The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Books are the building blocks of any society and one must not undermine their importance.However the given argument is falwed because of it's many vague assumptions.
Firstly, the Monarch Books is ambiguously comparing the old trends with the current modern times.It assumes thet opening a cafe will increase the customer base.However, this is absurd assumption as time changes and so does the mindset of the customer also changes.Hence, it might be possible that the customers in past twenty years might have changed their habits, or might have migrated somewhere else:far distant neighbourhood. So we can see the clear ambiguity in the outcome of the move.
Adding to the argument Monarch Book also claims that they will discontinue the children book section based on just one survey that the population under ten has declined .Though it might be possible that due to the "knowledge demanding world" modern society parents might have persuaded their childern to read more books.Or in other words we cannot draw the entire conclusion based on just a survey.However, in order to conclude some argument the Monarch book store might consider refering to many increasing trends in the book reading society.Though that must not be the last thing on their list, they may also conduct their own survey based on their past twenty years experience.
And finally , the Monarch Books want to compete with the Regal books.This statement in itself is flawed as Monarch books are considering discontinuing the children section.However, their counterpart Regal Books might have childern section, there is a possibility also that their major customer base might be childern rather than adults.In this case Monarch books will have complete disadvantage over the Regal books.In the other words there is absolutely no surety that the Monarch Books will have more adult customers.
In conclusion I want to state that time changes and one must not see old times as the new trend as it always canges also the major decisions must not be based on just one survey instead it must be wide angled approach in considering such business decisions.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: And finally , the Monarch Books want to compete with the Regal books.This statement in itself is flawed as Monarch books are considering discontinuing the children section.However, their counterpart Regal Books might have childern section, there is a possibility also that their major customer base might be childern rather than adults.In this case Monarch books will have complete disadvantage over the Regal books.In the other words there is absolutely no surety that the Monarch Books will have
Error: childern Suggestion: children
Sentence: In conclusion I want to state that time changes and one must not see old times as the new trend as it always canges also the major decisions must not be based on just one survey instead it must be wide angled approach in considering such business decisions.
Error: canges Suggestion: No alternate word
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flaws:
the arguments are not exactly correct. see a sample:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1742 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.893 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.389 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 28.684 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.404 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.741 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...one must not undermine their importance.However the given argument is falwed because of...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...one must not undermine their importance.However the given argument is falwed because of...
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Suggestion: It
...ld trends with the current modern times.It assumes thet opening a cafe will increa...
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Suggestion: However
... a cafe will increase the customer base.However, this is absurd assumption as time chan...
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Suggestion: Hence
...he mindset of the customer also changes.Hence, it might be possible that the customer...
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...at the population under ten has declined .Though it might be possible that due to ...
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Suggestion: Though
... the population under ten has declined .Though it might be possible that due to the &a...
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Suggestion: Or
...uaded their childern to read more books.Or in other words we cannot draw the entir...
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Suggestion: However
...ntire conclusion based on just a survey.However, in order to conclude some argument the...
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Suggestion: Though
...sing trends in the book reading society.Though that must not be the last thing on thei...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... twenty years experience. And finally , the Monarch Books want to compete with ...
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Suggestion: This
...ks want to compete with the Regal books.This statement in itself is flawed as Monarc...
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...ring discontinuing the children section.However, their counterpart Regal Books might ha...
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...se might be childern rather than adults.In this case Monarch books will have compl...
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...plete disadvantage over the Regal books.In the other words there is absolutely no ...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ooks will have more adult customers. In conclusion I want to state that time ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, may, so, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22965116279 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8655424885 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514534883721 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 22.8473053892 249% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 214.903595958 57.8364921388 372% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 299.833333333 119.503703932 251% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.3333333333 23.324526521 246% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.1666666667 5.70786347227 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233951505442 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10691130507 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.085913366361 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125615368476 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775328322424 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.9 14.3799401198 222% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.62 48.3550499002 28% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 12.197005988 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.32208582834 122% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.8 11.1389221557 223% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 11.9071856287 218% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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