Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
We often see youngsters are talking about celebrities, their new releases, news and scandals, or intimating their styles from top to bottom. Youngsters are easy target for anybody to influence towards them. Thus, I strongly believe that young generation gives more importance to celebrities compared to older people. I will elaborate my reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.
First, most of the youngsters have their own favorite idols. This is because that they are open to new trends and tend to follow such trends. Teenagers are always seeking out for fun and new trills out of their boring routine. Youngsters like relax themselves by watching movie, pop music, or sport games. For young people is prevailing to appreciate actors, singers or athletes. Sometimes the appreciation is not out of their will but of peer pressure to be cool and stay connected to their friends. For example, when I was young that time I was not fond of watching TV drama regularly. But I used to admire celebrities of TV drama’s because I use to be afraid of my peers, they might consider me as outdated.
In addition, the younger ones are more connected, with instant communications technologies such as Twitter, Facebook, YouTube and Instagram than the older. Youngsters usually spend tons of time in social media. Due to this fact they are in constant contact with celebrities’ opinions which increase the chance to be influenced. For example, I saw people, whose age is less than 18, changing their thoughts about a famous political candidate. Because of a YouTube, which post information about a fake case of corruption involving this politician.
Let’s put in a nutshell, celebrities have a large number of fans or followers their statements have the power to change people’s thoughts. The limited life experience of younger does not provide enough knowledge and maturity to judge or criticize external opinions because of that easily influence by celebrities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, thus, for example, in addition, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21698113208 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96281324612 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61320754717 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.984286144 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3157894737 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7368421053 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194514117022 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497953479301 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591020542851 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112725350505 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458574414955 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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