Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that just a very good educational background is not enough for success in the future job and people who have the ability in the relationship with others find more opportunity for prosperty in their future job. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that most important issue by bosses for choices employees is them knowledge around their task, so the ability of relationship have not special importance for them. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that the ability to relate well to people is crucial for today life.
First and foremost, from ancient people until now always people lived near together in small and big groups, they were not able to survive alone. they need to collaborated with each other for preparing foods and other things and because of the importance of this ability, they invented languages. Thus, we not separate from our ancestors, but also, our world is more complex and more dependent on our relationship. the psychologists substantiated that who are more skill in good communication with people are happier and are more satisfied with their life. Because they find the better social position in the society.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that employees who are more successful in the good relationship with their co-workers and also with the client have more opportunity of advance in their job. Because they through friendship relation to others create the positive environment in the company. In this calm condition all of the people can do their task with more efficiency and at the end, all of member and manager are satisfied in this circumstance. Therefore, a manager is more interest to employ people who have good ability in the relationship.
Finally, yet importantly, who has more skill in relating well can more quickly receive the higher level and more salary. Because these people produce the friendly relationship with powerful people and as we know today it is very essential for development.
On the basis of reason that mentioned above, I am convinced that people with the ability of good relationship are more successful than who study hard in school. because they can have more mentally healthy and more friend that led to more opportunity for success in their job.
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Starting from Pen to Pilot,
Starting from Pen to Pilot, there is technology involved. Technology is a part of our family, which is equally important as our loved ones, for instance we can consider mobile phones as our brain, it has every thing that completes us as a person and made our life easier in many ways that our ancestors might not have ever thought.
In starting days of technology there were many disputes for its involvment in human life, and there were creators and supprters who were so enticed with technical life that nothing has stopped them from many advancements one after and another.
With using internet it has touched the sky and going forward in multidirections with an uncalculative speed. It has been a boon and bane both, let us discuss about the advantages of the technology, for an instance Artificial Intelligence is nice blend of techonolgy and Internet, now used in many medical instruments- making of amputated parts of human body, transplatation for human organs, tansportation, automobiles- google driver less car is the best example, I can consider to explain technolgy, however, it has been not approved for public usew yet and many others which were not arduous task for early 18's and 19's people to do.Although it has given us a easier life to human being but at the same time it has taken many things from us as well, with the great advancements people have become more lazy than before, they have eventually stopped doing physical activities and want a personal robot to do minimal things being a human, which resulting a very bad effect on human species, simultaneously few advancments in chemical industries are impacting our environment as well, in the thrive to explore more and know more , we are actually forgetting that we are human and are living on earth and we have make our life habitable for our survival and others plants and animal species as well. As a resultant Technology which are supposed to upfrade our life can direct a degradation of our life.
Depending more on technology humans are becoming lesss dependent on their own intellectual, which god gifted only to them. We have to be observative about using technology and it's effects on our personal life. Excess of everything can bad, right usage should be the main obejective. We as a human are capable of doing everything.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02842377261 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71419692949 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488372093023 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1209474671 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.625 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1875 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394933964919 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13320766191 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930281572804 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249203181078 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109296557577 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.