The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health.
It is sometimes argued that the factors which make children be out of weight are the increase in fast food or they are are not well-cherished. While I agree with these point of views, I do not believe that they are main causes leading to the real situation.
To embark on, it is true that fast food's demand and the fewer parents pay attention to their offspring are one of the reasons. Firstly, fast food causes an increase in weight because it contains a fatty substance. For example, despite their deliciousness, however, burgers can contribute to weight gain, people will consume more calories than they expand, and burger can be high-calories food. Therefore, it will be harmful to eat a huge amount of fast-food. Secondly, due to the hectic schedule that most parents face, they do not have time to take care of children as well as children's health. So, it is also the significant key which can allow this problem to increase.
However, these aforementioned reasons can be seen as the opposite angle. One reason is people tend not to have extracurricular activities such as playing sport, climbing the mountain, or camping since not only the busy individuals deal with their work, but also many young adults set aside time on electronic devices. Therefore, when eating food every day but not acting to make food turn into energy will lead cause of weight gain. Another reason is the misinformation as other information may simply be outdated or based on theories that have never been fully proven. Many websites, for example, spread inaccurate or even incorrect information about health and nutrition. Consequently, misinformation may contribute to weight gain in some people.
In conclusion, while I believe there are two primary causes of obesity are junk-food and caring from parents, I do argue that there are many other reasons for this.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99677419355 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77678985785 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590322580645 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7432704604 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.266666667 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9333333333 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200900886537 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06379757567 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407008058496 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120234756686 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484273145777 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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