In some countries, solely urban areas have modern school and health care facilities, which leads to a highly controversial issue that whether teachers and doctors, who have just graduated, should work in remote areas for several years or any places that they like. I will discuss both sides of the issue in further details and give my personal view in the conclusion.
On the one hand, there are those who claim that new teachers and doctors should move to rural areas for work. The primary reason is that the living standard of local communities in remote zones may be enhanced, if more teachers and doctors come there. To illustrate, in some mountainous areas, which are located in the North of Vietnam, due to the support of new teachers and doctors, a lot of underprivileged children can go to school and many diseases or epidemics can be cured. Another reason is that rural areas are ideal places for teachers as well as doctors, who are lack of real experience to put theory into practice. In fact, modern as facilities in cities are, new workers do not have many opportunities to show their abilities, because there are a lot of professors in these fields.
On the other hand, other people believe that new teachers and doctors should free to select their working environment. First of all, they have a right to find good places in order to develop their skills. If the government impose a law that new teachers and doctors must work in rural zones, a majority of them may fell unsatisfied. As a result, they cannot work effectively, owing to lacking motivation. The second reason is that in the future, the number of labours for these occupations will decrease. Indeed, once new workers from these domains cannot choose expected working places, in the long run, students will not follow these careers, which leads to the shortage in the figure for people enter the workforce of education and medicine fields.
In conclusion, while some people maintain that new teachers and doctors should find jobs in rural places for a short time, I hold a firm conviction that they have the right to choose ideal places so as to fulfill their ambitions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...force of education and medicine fields. In conclusion, while some people maintai...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...y have the right to choose ideal places so as to fulfill their ambitions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, well, while, as for, as to, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83513513514 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53931108837 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508108108108 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.7994204451 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.785714286 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374153396665 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124511766184 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896884352484 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227768241036 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033912466731 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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