The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries China and India

Essay topics:

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India.

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of the average food used for consumpttion in the world , China and India in the year 2008.
In general, it is evident that processed food is the most popular food in the World and two countries while the opposite was true for Nuts and seeds in the World and India. In addition, in the World and India, the biggest difference was in the proportion of processed food and Nuts and seeds.
As can be seen from the chart, regarding to processed food, the percentage of food consumption in the world took the lead, with 40%, followed by India. At 39%. The proportion of food consumption in China came bottom, at 34%. For Animal food, the percentage of food which was consumed in the World and India was relatively similar, hovering at 26%. The proportion of Animal food consumption in China was lowest, with 15%.
Looking at the graph for more detail, for Vestables and Fruits, the figure for vestables and Fruits which used for consumption in China, at 32% was higher than the World and, India, with 39% and 23% respectively. For the average consumption of Nuts and Seeds, the percentage of Nuts and Seeds in India, which stood at 11% exceeded the World, with 4%.

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Average: 5.9 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, regarding, while, in addition, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 994.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 212.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68867924528 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53445476454 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443396226415 0.547539520022 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 280.8 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 3.36585365854 327% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3632549621 43.030603864 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.444444444 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5555555556 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357471986621 0.215688989381 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174585274482 0.103423049105 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103630767855 0.0843802449381 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265210487641 0.15604864568 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103797562138 0.0819641961636 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.4329268293 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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