Without communication, relationships could break down. When parents spend most of their time working some people believe that they should play with kids while others consider that academic duties should come first. Both have positive and negative aspects. However, I personally believe that helping children with thing related to schoolwork is the best option for recovering the time wasted. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, developing activities together may provide people with more connections among them. Even these activities are academic, children will more comfortable with the presence of their parents for helping them consequently, they may improve their father-kid relationship. By doing this, the environment at home may be affected positively. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a child, in the beginning, my father did not use to spend so much time with me because most of his time he used to work even outside of the city which involved that our relationship was weak in certain aspects. Nevertheless, this reality changed when due to the little connection between us, he asked his boss to reduce his hours at his job in order to spend more time at home. Having been accepted his inquiry, we could spend more time together but the activities we used to do were related to schoolwork because I could do my homework and strengthen our relationship simultaneously.
Secondly, helping children with their academic duties does not only make the relationship stronger but also provide children with more tools for improving their performance in class. According to several psychology studies children catch more information and process it more efficient when they are taught by one of their parents. For instance, my nephew, who is ten years old, used to distract in class which involved that his performance was questioned by some professors who explained to my brother that he needed to avoid distractions such as internet or television. However, only one of them gave my brother an important advice which consisted in that he should help his kid to gain more interest in activities related to schoolwork. Having incorporated this suggestion to his schedule, my brother and his child started to spend 2 hours daily to reinforce information learned in class. By doing this, my nephew did no only improve his performance in class but also gain more confidence to participate more than other students. Due to these results, this activity became a habit in my brother’s family.
In conclusion, I strongly consider that spending time with children in activities which involve contributing with the preparation of them is weigh better than wasting this time in recreative activities because it would help kids not only in short-term but also in long-term.
Without communication, relationships could break down. When parents spend most of their time working some people believe that they should play with kids while others consider that academic duties should come first. Both have positive and negative aspects. However, I personally believe that helping children with thing related to schoolwork is the best option for recovering the time wasted. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, developing activities together may provide people with more connections among them. Even these activities are academic, children will more comfortable with the presence of their parents for helping them consequently, they may improve their father-kid relationship. By doing this, the environment at home may be affected positively. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a child, in the beginning, my father did not use to spend so much time with me because most of his time he used to work even outside of the city which involved that our relationship was weak in certain aspects. Nevertheless, this reality changed when due to the little connection between us, he asked his boss to reduce his hours at his job in order to spend more time at home. Having been accepted his inquiry, we could spend more time together but the activities we used to do were related to schoolwork because I could do my homework and strengthen our relationship simultaneously.
Secondly, helping children with their academic duties does not only make the relationship stronger but also provide children with more tools for improving their performance in class. According to several psychology studies children catch more information and process it more efficient when they are taught by one of their parents. For instance, my nephew, who is ten years old, used to distract in class which involved that his performance was questioned by some professors who explained to my brother that he needed to avoid distractions such as internet or television. However, only one of them gave my brother an important advice which consisted in that he should help his kid to gain more interest in activities related to schoolwork. Having incorporated this suggestion to his schedule, my brother and his child started to spend 2 hours daily to reinforce information learned in class. By doing this, my nephew did no only improve his performance in class but also gain more confidence to participate more than other students. Due to these results, this activity became a habit in my brother’s family.
In conclusion, I strongly consider that spending time with children in activities which involve contributing with the preparation of them is weigh better than wasting this time in recreative activities because it would help kids not only in short-term but also in long-term.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cation, relationships could break down. When parents spend most of their time workin...
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Line 2, column 454, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ld, in the beginning, my father did not use to spend so much time with me because m...
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Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun psychology seems to be countable; consider using: 'several psychologies'.
Suggestion: several psychologies
...heir performance in class. According to several psychology studies children catch more information...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in short, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15053763441 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88458692291 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509677419355 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7935953625 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.75 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32547107469 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114757889753 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163620859551 0.0737576698707 222% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258788834636 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.234884329211 0.0645574589148 364% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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