Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that take a part-time job has several positive effects on shaping personality and character of teenage children. It is substantiated that a part-time job can prepare teenagers for more superiority in adult life. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that a part-time working for teenagers would force a lot of pressure on them and can damage to their happiness. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that one of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
First and foremost, a part-time job would be a great opportunity to practice responsibility and time managing. For example, when I was sixteen years old, I was working in a veterinary. My responsibility was to receiving ill animals and putting them in cages. It was a challenging task because a little careless in writing the name of animals could create a huge problem in the veterinary. In addition, I should manage my time in order to handle all of my personal task including school and homework, and did my job.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that a part-time job could benefit the socialization process in teenagers. In the workplace, children would be experienced collaboration with different people than their family or friends. Children involve in group cooperation with other people whereby, they can obtain the ability of teamwork and respectful communication.
Finally, yet importantly, these work experiences could be useful to find a part-time job in young age or even a full-time job after graduation from the university. Every few skills that people gain during their past jobs would be interesting for job managers to be more confident about the qualification of applicants. For instance, my veterinary experience not only was helpful for my admission to graduate school, but also it was an attractive part of my application for referees as an animal genetic lab engineer.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that take a part-time job would be quite beneficial for teenage people. Because of its proper role in responsibility, socialization of children and could be powered their resume for earning better jobs in future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 269, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ed their resume for earning better jobs in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11256544503 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04120550939 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55497382199 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5441896426 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.882352941 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.488840021351 0.236089414692 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162761496906 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.178575363441 0.0737576698707 242% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266674633799 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.22107386296 0.0645574589148 342% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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