Young people should spend more time on cultural activities such as music or theatre and less time on sport. How far do you agree with this statement.
It has always been a controversial issue over whether cultural activities or sport is deemed more important for teenagers. While individuals argue that the latter will help you to be healthy, I firmly believe that both are required in children’s development
There is no denying the fact that cultural activities are good for their mind and spirit. Firstly, it allow young people to be creative and help to broaden their understanding about the culture and history of one country because they experience different cities, learn about cultures, customs and even languages from other countries. For example, if we take part in a local festival or a trip, they have more opportunities to understand the meaning of this or talk to local residents. Secondly, music or theater can help them change moods. Because it helps them relax and reduce stress. They will be happier and more comfortable after watching a comedy or listening a funny music when they are blue
As children grow up, developing their mind is not enough, they need to consolidate their health. Sports gives adolescents the chance to exercise, which is essential for health. If they only participate cultural activities without playing any sports, their endurance is bad, as a result, they can not continue spending time on other activities, even study. Moreover, playing a sport teaches young children about the rules and teamwork. More details, solidarity will make you win opponents.
In conclusion, both cultural activities and sports play equally important roles in children’s various stage of their life play equally important roles in children’s various stage of their life. It is reasonable to balance them so as to develop their competency to the fullest
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'allows'?
Suggestion: allows
... for their mind and spirit. Firstly, it allow young people to be creative and help to...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... life. It is reasonable to balance them so as to develop their competency to the fullest...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27598566308 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89157358999 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591397849462 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.2604621703 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.230769231 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4615384615 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161459874122 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560194237157 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363175061794 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964352875703 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336393962627 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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