Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The statement indicates that the woven baskets were not unique in palea, as the baskets were also found in another ancient village, the Lithos, across the brim river from palea. It cites that the river between the two village is deep and broad so that the ancients could not cross it without boats which were not found the ramnants. Carefully consider its evidences, the assumptions it makes seem illogic and incredible.
First, it falsely assumes that the river would remain the same deep and broad forever. It's perhaps that the river was just a shallow ditch in the past where the ancients could get across it by foots, or the river didn't exsit in that time and was revoluted gradually after a long period. There are lots of alternatives that can explain that the people that time didn't need the boat to get to the other village. Thus, the baskets maybe bring by the merchants for sell to the Lithos, or bring as a gift to this village.
And another suspect evidence it propose is that the boats were not found now, and it indicates that there were no boat in the past. Obviously the reasoning is incorrect. The fact that There were no boat remnant in recent days, may just comes from the decadence of the wood of the boats. The conclusion that people cannot swift between the two village by boats is so untenable that it also cannot conclude that the baskets were not unique.
In sum, the argument that the Palean baskets were not only made by palean is not convincing enough because the evidences it cites cannot support its point of view. To get a more inclusive and authentic consequece, it needs to rule out all the alternatives mentioned above.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 296 350
No. of Characters: 1332 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.148 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.209 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 76 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.45 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s that the woven baskets were not unique in palea, as the baskets were also found...
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Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in another ancient village, the Lithos, across the brim river from palea. It cit...
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Line 1, column 424, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s it makes seem illogic and incredible. First, it falsely assumes that the river...
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Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ld get across it by foots, or the river didnt exsit in that time and was revoluted gr...
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Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...t can explain that the people that time didnt need the boat to get to the other villa...
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Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: FOR_SELL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'for sale'?
Suggestion: for sale
...he baskets maybe bring by the merchants for sell to the Lithos, or bring as a gift to th...
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Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...os, or bring as a gift to this village. And another suspect evidence it propose ...
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Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'proposes'?
Suggestion: proposes
...e. And another suspect evidence it propose is that the boats were not found now, a...
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Line 5, column 440, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...clude that the baskets were not unique. In sum, the argument that the Palean bas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 294.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65306122449 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27212921087 2.78398813304 82% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486394557823 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 705.55239521 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8999936451 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.230769231 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134680022252 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443473479538 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571964673825 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876203850829 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502175740679 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.