There is a controversial debate about whether governments should spend more money on arts than on athletics. Some groups of people hold the view that it is better to invest in athletics. other groups have an opposite view, and feel that it is more rewarding to invest in arts. From my vintage, I am concur the latter option for different reasons.
First, governments investing in arts can change the cultural view of it's civilization. In fact, spending more money on arts may give a special value to the history of the country, the artists that influenced the culture and the artistic places in this country. A vivid example that can illustrate my view is the artistic places in Florence. Confidently, The government of Italy has spend so much money to enhance the artistic places in the city. As a result, tourists from all over the world go to visit the magnificent artistic place, which has it footprints on it's culture.
The second reason which deserves some words hear is that governments can have rewards in return for investing in arts. In other words, governments may have a financial benefits out of this investment . For instance, in Florence, the entrance fees to be admitted to one of the artistic places in this city is around $20. Considering a 1000 visitors each day who are admitted to these places,then, the government would be making at least $20000 each day. This large amount of money are significant rewards for the government. Thus, it is a financially rewarding project.
Although the aforementioned reasons were the first to cross my mind at a glance, they are by no means the only reasons. In fact, There is a further subtle point which is worth to be mentioned.The trustworthy, refreshingly, intelligently study which was conducted in my country that showed the governments prefer to invest in art rather than athletics. This study enrolled 120 higher educational people from diverse field to reduce the effect of biasing.
To wrap up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that governments should invest in arts more than athletics. If they did so, then we will a witness a whole new generation who does not only love arts, but adore it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, then, thus, at least, for instance, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92991913747 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87019617315 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544474393531 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9500938672 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.45 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.55 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12201152534 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405881170521 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519215562617 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0727721078849 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243550361825 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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