The lecturer disputes the origin of fossils found in the remains of Tyrannosaurus rex that lived seventy millions years ago. The lecturer asserts that the discovered fossils are not likely to be neither blood vessels, nor red blood cells. Moreover, he excludes the possibility that they are collagen matrix remains.
First, the lecturer states that it is possible that those remains are colonies of bacteria that were living in bones. The author claims that the hollows in bones are traces of blood vessels. However, the lecturer contends that those colonies are not blood vessels, but they are indeed some organic material which represents moist residues of bacteria.
Secondly, the lecturer argues that the microscopic examination results revealed that the spheres are peaces of reddish mineral instead of red blood cells. According to the lecturer those spheres were discovered in the remains of some primitive animals which do not have red blood cells. Thus, having those sphere in such animals makes us believe that the spheres are indeed not red blood cells.
Finally, the lecturer excludes the possibility that collagen is the substance which is found after the test leg bone. The lecturer argues that no collagen can be detect after seventy thousand years after the death of animals. Therefore, since Tyrannosaurus lived more that seventy million years ago, it is most probably not collagen, but a traces of researcher's skin.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 301, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sphere' or 'those spheres'?
Suggestion: this sphere; those spheres
... not have red blood cells. Thus, having those sphere in such animals makes us believe that t...
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Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd after the test leg bone. The lecturer argues that no collagen can be detect af...
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Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a trace' or simply 'traces'?
Suggestion: a trace; traces
..., it is most probably not collagen, but a traces of researchers skin.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1209.0 1373.03311258 88% => OK
No of words: 230.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25652173913 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46337635419 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 145.348785872 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491304347826 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 375.3 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.6915463831 49.2860985944 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.75 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06452816374 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357568135753 0.272083759551 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140850124155 0.0996497079465 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592915339487 0.0662205650399 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213835537848 0.162205337803 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540100526134 0.0443174109184 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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