Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people.
Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?
Holidaymakers are mainly visiting numerous museums and historical sites rather than local people. In accordance with this statement, this essay will explain further information about contributing factor of the issue and also put forward the remedial measures in the following paragraphs.
In regard to the issue, I strongly believe that there are several reason of why those places mainly being visited by tourists. Visitor, first and foremost, has an enormous endeavour to try and visit new places, therefore, a majority of people who come to the tourist destinations are holidaymakers. Second but not less crucial, I, moreover, think that local society has already visited those places for numerous time, thus, I believe that they are not fascinated to visit those places anymore.
In accordance with the counter measures of how to attract more local individuals to these places. The government, firstly, has to maintain and control those tourist destinations in order to keep it having an excellent quality. Secondly, the authority, furthermore, need to build the newest and the best facilities in order to assist all visitors more enjoying their time while they were visiting those places. The bureaucrat, lastly, also has to make a regular event on those places, particularly for organizing an appealing event such as culture competition or music festival.
By way of conclusion, it seems to me that all tourist destinations, including museums and historical buildings, have to be monitored gradually by the authority. Thereby, in order to make all those positive efforts can be done, all people have to support the bureaucrat to maintain those places properly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...ssue, I strongly believe that there are several reason of why those places mainly being visite...
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Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
... foremost, has an enormous endeavour to try and visit new places, therefore, a majority...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, such as, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39694656489 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8869902025 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603053435115 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1006479176 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.545454545 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335147257785 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124549568762 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971955428711 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186245921685 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059329339023 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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