According to different culture, the majority of young adults would like to perform various preference when it comes to the situation of living or not with their parents after they growing old. In general, western culture is inclined to being independence while eastern emphasizes more on the parent- child relationship. As to me, I think that liberating oneself from the dependence on one’s parents is critical for the army of young adults marching into the society.
The first key is developing of your own individualities. Living with ones’parents has nothing to do with advancing ones’own personalities.
It is a safe and ease shelter for the young as parents could help to cook, clean the house, provide a dwell for free and so on. But the social competition is curel. Only if when you are faced pressure by yourself, carry the responsibilities on your shoulder, you could be strong enough to handle and move forward into a bright future. After all, your parents cannot protect you a whole life.
All in all, a ship is always safe at home, but that is not what it is built for. Life is full of risk as well as surprise, with your parents you can not find it for your own’s sake.
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 60
- do agree or disagree/ playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- TPO 12 - Jane Austen Portrait 75
- TOEFL T P O 49 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 101, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... help to cook, clean the house, provide a dwell for free and so on. But the social comp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, while, after all, as to, i think, in general, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1002.0 1977.66487455 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 208.0 407.700716846 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81730769231 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 4.48103885553 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9162369365 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.639423076923 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 309.6 618.680645161 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.658738673 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0909090909 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26938060367 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846884536056 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781169700116 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144775489258 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975079079647 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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