The given line graph below illustrates the changes of music application program choice in terms of the rate of the people using 2 new music sites: music choice and pop parade on the web.
In general, one of the most notable features of the graph is that the number of visitors coming 2 sites rose and fell erratically. But the main fact that stands out from this picture is that at both of the beginning and ending of the period, the Pop Parade site is the most popular choice among these two.
In the first day when the sites opened on, the quantity of the view of people using the Pop parade website was significantly higher at nearly 120 thousands view meanwhile that of remain site was really lower at about 40 thousands view. The next 9 days of the period experienced a dramatic decrease of the number of the view of Pop Parade website nearly 120,000 to 40,000 views. In the same period, figure of another website fluctuated widely between 20,000 and 60,000 views . In the 9th day, the number of visit to music choice and pop parade site stood at more 20,000 and nearly 40,000 views respectively.
In 2 days next of the period, there was a huge increase of the rate of people using the pop parade from 40,000 to 150 thousands views while that of people using music choice fluctuated slightly from 20,000 to nearly 30,000 views. But the period from 11th to 13th witnessed a slump of the number of the views of the pop parade of 70 thousands views while it is the first time that the number of visit to music choice was higher and rocketed by 80 thousands views.
In the last 2 days of the period, the number of viewer using pop parade site rose sharply from 80,000 to 170,000 views meanwhile that of music choice fell steeply by 40,000 views. So at the ending of the period,a much larger percentage of viewers used pop parade site in comparison with music choice site.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 306, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he most popular choice among these two. In the first day when the sites opened o...
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Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...d widely between 20,000 and 60,000 views . In the 9th day, the number of visit to ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... and nearly 40,000 views respectively. In 2 days next of the period, there was a ...
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Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
...00 views. So at the ending of the period,a much larger percentage of viewers used ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, so, while, in fact, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 33.7804878049 195% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 965.302439024 159% => OK
No of words: 342.0 196.424390244 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49122807018 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 3.73543355544 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22027310514 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 106.607317073 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.406432748538 0.547539520022 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 454.5 283.868780488 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0088026073 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.636363636 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0909090909 22.9334400587 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.23603664747 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206121397847 0.215688989381 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101845479921 0.103423049105 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728837983986 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145671748756 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650628408063 0.0819641961636 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.39 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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