It is indisputable that money is one of an important and essential component in everyone lives and it will affect our lives in several aspects. Some people take the view that it is important for a rich person to contribute part of their budget to charity and others disagree with this point. To be frank, as far as I concerned I believe that rich or even ordinary people who don’t have difficulty in their lives have to allocate some amount of their money to charity. There seen to be a number of benefits associated with making a contribution, and I would explore some of these benefits which are more conspicuous for me in the following essay.
First and foremost, the twenty century has brought too many advances, with these advancements, our lives have altered dramatically and also our lives have become more complicated rather than before, in this complicated society it is difficult for people to even for educated people to earn some money. My personal experience would be a great example of this issue, due to financial crises the company that I worked for bankrupted so they had to downsize its workforce by 20%, and many people made a redundant in that time like me, so afterward it was hard for me to buy livelihood, one day I decided to go to charity and ask them to help me, and they helped me to prevail over that difficulty, I do not know what would have done without their help.
Second significant thing which deserves some word here is that all people in my country must have the right to attend to university even the people who live in slam part of my country who are not afford the money to attending to university, by allocating some amount of money we will provide the opportunity to attend university and follow their dream because the charity is able to recognize better the people who do not afford the money.
Finally, the charity can help the country to deal with emergency better, which means that when the one-day country will face with insurmountable problem and government does not have sufficient money to solve that problem charity with help government to deal with it better. I recently read a report in a major newspaper which pointed out that within the past decade certain country in South Asia suffered from a shortage of water as a result of lack of government money to build a dam in order to supply the water for people, and some charity company borrowed an inordinate money to government to ameliorate the situation, at the end government were able to construct the dam with charity contribution.
To sum up, due to the aforementioned reason that I have discussed above, I believed that it is beneficial for both for government and society to people give away some amount of their money to charity, for example, can wipe out the poverty and they will the society to prosper earlier.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'afforded'.
Suggestion: afforded
... in slam part of my country who are not afford the money to attending to university, b...
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Line 4, column 560, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'inordinate money'.
Suggestion: inordinate money
...ople, and some charity company borrowed an inordinate money to government to ameliorate the situati...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uct the dam with charity contribution. To sum up, due to the aforementioned rea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, for example, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69879518072 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64293951352 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475903614458 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 772.2 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 49.0 20.1344086022 243% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.01373831 48.9658058833 235% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 234.0 100.406767564 233% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 49.8 20.6045352989 242% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271653786406 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108266393571 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358901355317 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147768503098 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190381916512 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.6 11.7677419355 218% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 58.1214874552 37% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 10.1575268817 221% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.87 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 21.6 10.0537634409 215% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 10.247311828 215% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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