you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letterExplain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your wo

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you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months
Say how your work could be done while you are away
Ask for him/her help in arranging it

Dear Mr Smith,

I am writing this letter to you to express my great willingness in the training program “Essential Selling Management” which will be held in the upcoming month in our head office in Shanghai, China. For your information, I am working in the Taipei office; thus, a short period of relocation will be needed so that I am able to work in our head office during the training.

As a regional manager, through examining the curriculum of this program carefully, I learned that it contains a large number of theories and practices which, I believe, will be substantially beneficial with respect to my current work.

I am fully aware that taking lessons in another workplace might lead to poor communication with the colleagues working remotely. However, thanks to the state-of-art remote meeting and collaboration system of our company, I am convinced that If I keep online during my absence, I could be reached without any obstacles. As for handling the daily work, I will ask my secretary John to help me with all kinds of everyday issues.

I would appreciate it so much if you could permit to provide such a great chance to me and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Perry Huang

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 111, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...m carefully, I learned that it contains a large number of theories and practices which, I believe...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 51, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'providing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'permit' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: providing
...preciate it so much if you could permit to provide such a great chance to me and I am look...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ring from you soon. Yours faithfully, Perry Huang
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, thus, as for, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1047.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 211.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96208530806 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99162896996 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625592417062 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 313.2 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.7702905442 44.8134815571 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.875 76.5299724578 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.375 16.8248392259 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 4.34317383033 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239165950334 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099254186773 0.0766984524023 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621362649846 0.0603063233224 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120830890999 0.12726935374 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795409730582 0.0580467560999 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 8.37731958763 180% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 70.7449484536 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 7.45979381443 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 8.71597938144 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 8.62886597938 232% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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