Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number
of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public
health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
While some people believe that providing more sports facilities is the most efficient way to improve the physical health of individuals, others would argue that this approach has little impact on public health and that other initiatives should be considered. Although more exercising areas encourage people to come and train, this essay believes that raising the young’s awareness about the dangers of fast food is a better way to improve public health.
On the one hand, the majority of citizens will exercise more frequently when they are provided with a large number of public training locations. This is to say that most people prefer staying at home for free rather than paying the gyms. If more public facilities are provided, people will come and start working out to improve their health. For example, surveys show that residents of Ho Chi Minh City are now seen to exercise more frequently as the authorities have opened more parks to the public. However, this essay believes that insufficient exercises are only a small cause of bad health conditions.
On the other hand, the huge consumption of fast food is the biggest cause of bad health conditions and the better solution is to teach young people about the dangers of eating this type of food. Even with intense exercises, people still cannot be able to burn the extra calories from the amount of fast food they have consumed. Therefore, children in schools should be taught about the severe consequences to their health for eating unhealthily and they are also to teach their parents what they learned. For example, public health in Vietnam has vastly improved since children learned and shared with their parents the dangers of having heart diseases caused by fast food. This essay believes that this initiative brings a strong impact on public health everywhere.
In conclusion, although sports facilities encourage people to exercise more, the use of fast food is the culprit behind people’s bad health conditions and the young should be taught about the consequences of eating too much fast food.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2019-06-01 | drtruong92 | 67 | view |
- In some countries, young people at the age of 18 are considered adults and can drive a car, vote and get married, while other countries don't allow it. What age do you think is the best to be considered an adult? Give reasons and examples. 61
- Writing task 1 the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 11
- In recent years the pressure of students in university is increasing and they are pushed to work hard from a young age Do you think it is a positive or negative development 75
- Some people think that it is necessary to travel to and live in another country to effectively learn their culture and language. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? 89
- Shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. Do you agree or disagree. 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... frequently when they are provided with a large number of public training locations. This is to s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11436950147 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51963676226 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492668621701 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.1663248062 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.153846154 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2307692308 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211152411577 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883882601663 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593709215713 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141600118425 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667744705664 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.