Some reports have discovered the incidence of violence /crimes committed by young women is increasing. Give possible reasons and and recommendations to the situation.
There are studies that show the rate of violent crimes committed by young females is on the rise. I feel there are two reasons for this unfortunate situation: the ease of access of firearms and the lack of social and economical support structures.
First, before the development of technology, women were physically unable to commit violent crimes because they were not strong enough. Now, with the help of firearms, it is easier for them to cause greater damage. Second, the increasing number of young female criminals could be a result of gender equity. In many developing areas, women still have less opportunities for education and careers in favor of more traditional roles in the social structure. Now with this social structure eroding away and women are required to carry some of the financial burden but without educational and professional support, this could contribute to some woman to down the preverbal wrong path and commit more crimes than before.
There are several ways to improve this situation. First and the foremost, is to improve the law and make deadly weapons less accessible for potential criminals. For instance, the law enforcement should require more certifications and background checks for anyone who wants to purchase weapons. The government can also require weapon carriers to visit psychiatrists annually, similar to a physical, so the doctors can spot potentially dangerous behaviors early on. Second, the authority and the public could work together and help improve the gender equity. By providing young females alternative paths of supporting themselves, they would less likely to break the law. Take education for an example, there should be more scholarships for less privileged females. This would enable these woman to finish their education and acquire the skills they need to be competitive in the job market. The government also should place sanctions on employers that have preference on hiring certain genders instead of choosing equally,
To sum up, the access to deadly weapons and the unequal environment for females are two of many reasons that should be responsible for the increasing number of violent young female criminals. In order to remedy the damage, we need to regulate firearm usage and fill the gender gap step by step.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
... of firearms and the lack of social and economical support structures. First, before ...
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Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cial and economical support structures. First, before the development of technol...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun opportunities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...many developing areas, women still have less opportunities for education and careers...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ditional roles in the social structure. Now with this social structure eroding a...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ng away and women are required to carry some of the financial burden but without educationa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, still, for instance, i feel, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24795640327 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71279373108 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558583106267 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6806260375 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.294117647 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23529411765 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12674447024 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410633626073 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461359555242 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0921906082927 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571482058775 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.