Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history the effect of well-known people on others has been widespread phenomenon. famous people can have a considerable impression on environments they live in. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people or older people. Some people possess the conviction that youth are more sensitive to their influence and see celebrities’ demeanor meticulously whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that old people consider celebrities more exactly. I personally contend that young peoples are more interested in famous people and celebrities have more impact on them. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that according to psychological point of view, all people need to take someone as his hero and imitate his behaviors and works. In other word, human being require an idle to inspire him. Thanks to the energy, mobility, hopes and wishes of youth, this tendency in young people is absolutely stronger than older people. To shed light on this issue we can consider the superstar football player Cristiano Ronaldo and his impression on young persons. Had we look carefully our environment and young people, we would see the effect of him on hair style, gesture and behavior of youth.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that in the modern era, media have an indisputable effect on the life style of human being. Indeed, media manipulate lives of us. On the other hand, celebrities are one of the prominent arms of these media. Meticulous attention to media would demonstrate that most of the concentration of them is on young people. In fact, they want change life style of young people is a way that they want and young people are appropriate choice for them. Because youth do not have enough experience and are deceived more easily.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that not only the young people have a disposition to get influence from celebrities, but also media have a special concentration on them. As a consequence, young people should be aware of these effects and do not permit celebrities and media to manipulate them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Famous
... others has been widespread phenomenon. famous people can have a considerable impressi...
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Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
... reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 3, column 543, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'looked'.
Suggestion: looked
...his impression on young persons. Had we look carefully our environment and young peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, regarding, second, so, well, whereas, in brief, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17480719794 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89601439445 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537275064267 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6180839706 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.947368421 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181923987136 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580396422889 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493338428977 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106503905086 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533914997265 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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