It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by society? Give specific reasons to support your answer.
Work is an essential part of our lives because it is the machine of our society, and allows us to continue living in this world. Everyone chooses, according to his vocation or, in other cases due to circumstances, how to contribute to our society. Generally speaking, we can identify two big types of occupations with their own contributions: scientific and artistic. From my point of view, scientific contributions are more valued in my society.
First of all, one of the most important concerns of the population, health is responsibility of scientists. The most well-known scientific professionals related to health are the medical doctors who work in hospitals and clinics trying to heal diseases and improve public health. However, there are plenty of scientists that we do not see who dedicate themselves entirely to the extensive task of doing research for the discovery of new vaccines or creation of new medicines to cope with a variety of illnesses. Their contributions are praised by the population because they can save many lives. For example, a few years ago a research team at the University of Texas at Austin made a powerful medicine which is used today to diminish the effects of AIDS. When their research was published, those academics were applauded by the entire world.
Second, advancements in technology are the product of scientific contributions. Astonishing products and softwares have been created due to the dedication of creative engineers. Among them, I can mention: the cellphone, the computer, the internet, and social networks applications. Those inventions have immensely changed our society. For example, with the invention of the Internet, we can have instant high-quality communication with another person in another country in the other hemisphere.
Thirdly, people do not value art as much as science because they deem it as entertainment and not essential. Music, TV shows, and paintings are not among our basic needs. I can live without listening to music. Of course, life would be so much boring without art in our daily routines, but the truth is that we can live without it. Another example that artistic contributions are not as relevant is that artists are generally not well paid. There are many street singers who earn little money. Although there are huge exceptions, such as big celebrities who are well known by the population. Nevertheless, according to research conducted by the National Survey Center, the average salary of artists is 20% lower than those from scientific careers, which agrees with other irrefutable evidence that proves that scientific work is more valued by our society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, third, thirdly, well, for example, of course, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2323943662 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99296511092 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56338028169 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2097181169 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9130434783 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180088502252 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451956110654 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582025812116 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107703480544 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597209176291 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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