Do you agree or disagree with the following statement/
Television advertising directed toward young children aged two to five should not be allowed
Today, there are various types of advertisements on any devices such as a television, a radio, an internet, etc. All of them in everywhere, and they reflected in anytime, and all people could see them in their life when they want.
First of all, advertising is necessary, it is used by companies and factories for improving their incomes. Because, a high money is related with a good advertisements. And, all types of companies would divide their budget for their products' exhibits. Although, these activities about their productions which produced by companies decreases their money, these companies' bosses wonder these facilities for their reputations, and they tend to consume their money for that process which is named the advertisement.
Also, there are many types of methods of advertisement, some of them focus age of customers, some of them look places of consumer, some of them seek possible types of men or women. And, these some parts of advertisements consider only young children. And, almost all of them are about toys, but some parts of them are about computer games, internet games or any other technologic apps. All of these tools usually affect children badly and negatively, they cause asocial behavior on children who play with them. And, sometimes these types of material causes depression. For that reason, the young child's parents want to prevent their members playing with these devices, and they ban their children watching these advertisements.
In addition, some advertisements that interested in children drop families budget down, some families have money but other not, so poor family have to think how they not allow their children from advertisement.
Moreover, in these time today, there are several advertisements which about a porn. And, these kinds of a sexual advertisement impact children's mental health, maybe they cause sexual anxiety of children. And, these children could be face with prison after these bad activities.
In conclusion, taking account of all above reason, I definitely agree that statement. The television advertising toward young children aged two to five should not be allowed by parents, also goverments too.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... factories for improving their incomes. Because, a high money is related with a good ad...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'high money'.
Suggestion: high money
...s for improving their incomes. Because, a high money is related with a good advertisements. ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'advertisement'?
Suggestion: advertisement
...se, a high money is related with a good advertisements. And, all types of companies would divi...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ocess which is named the advertisement. Also, there are many types of methods of...
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Suggestion:
...llow their children from advertisement. Moreover, in these time today, there are...
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Suggestion:
...at statement. The television advertising toward young children aged two to five s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33623188406 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84746872412 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550724637681 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3653181334 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.277777778 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178039779268 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732328359486 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108510918953 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128592198899 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144908850639 0.0645574589148 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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