Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
The prompt states that the ancient Palean boats; believed to have made by only Palean people in a distinctive style, are not unique. It presented this argument by referring to the findings of archaeologist who states that Lithos was a village which could not be travelled to by any method except boat, however, the non-existence of boats led them to conclude that different community used to manufacture these baskets as well. However, the argument does not make a cogent case since it is rife with holes and fissures. Before this argument can be properly evaluated, following evidences must be collected and verified.
First of all, were people from Lithos and Palean different? In other words, is it correct to assume that in ancient times there were two different communities? It may not likely so. For instance, it may happen that even before finding and naming these two communities by different name by archaeologist, they were actually same but no discovery was undertaken during pre-ancient times. Further, are “such baskets” that found recently paralleled to ancient times? It may likely that the basket found recently may have some features of that ancient baskets because people from these two communities might live nearby and might exchange their styles but if one may venture to match these two basket meticulously, he/she may find nuances in style, therefore, may render the ancient baskets still unique. If both the instance were true, then the argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, had Paleans not travelled to Lithos in ancient times because the river was broad then and they were not having boats? In other words, is it justified to presume that these Paleans have never travelled and settled in Lithos because the river was broad and deep also then and they were not possessing any boat? It may be specious. For instance, it may happen that during ancient times the river was there but it was not that deep and broad but due to subsequent deforestation and habitation, it precipitated to deep and broad. Therefore, during ancient times they might be able to cross it even on foot because it was lacking in depth. Further, it may also found that they crossed it peripatetically and settled there and started to manufacture these baskets with their same unique style and not long ago, the archaeologist found the remnants of this community and given them different name though they were Paleans originally. If both the examples were holding the merit, then the argument does not hold the water.
Thirdly, does not finding any boat exemplify that they did not use it at all? In other words, is it prudent to conclude that since no boat has been found by archaeologist in a recent discovery, therefore, concluded that they did not use it? It may not be viable. For instance, it may happen that these Paleans might travel to Lithos and settled there by crossing the river by boat but as river became deep and broad, these boats might sink or even might flow to faraway places with the current. Further, it may also happen that these Paleans had boats and they used them to cross the river. Or it may also happen that they crossed the river with small size wooden made structure such as wooden poles tied together tightly and after crossing the river they untied them and carried them to Lithos for using them in huts. Unless the findings are fully representative and viable, it cannot be used to effectively support the argument.
The argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed since it relies heavily on several unwarranted assumptions. If the archaeologists are able to offer more evidence, perhaps in the form of original ethnicity of Lithos and mode of transport available to Paleans, then it will be possible to evaluate the viability of the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- better to say: the sample is small. it has only one.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- better to say: maybe people in Lithos have boats.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 641 350
No. of Characters: 3080 1500
No. of Different Words: 248 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.032 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.805 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.52 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 205 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 148 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.741 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.967 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.815 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.472 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a distinctive style" with adverb for "distinctive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...eved to have made by only Palean people in a distinctive style, are not unique. It presented this argu...
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Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...ollected and verified. First of all, were people from Lithos and Palean different...
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Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...r was broad and deep also then and they were not possessing any boat? It may be specious. For insta...
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Line 7, column 19, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'find'
Suggestion: find
...ot hold the water. Thirdly, does not finding any boat exemplify that they did not us...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, for instance, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 11.1786427146 268% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 28.8173652695 267% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3172.0 2260.96107784 140% => OK
No of words: 640.0 441.139720559 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95625 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02973371873 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62639657789 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 204.123752495 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4078125 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 995.4 705.55239521 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 4.96107784431 323% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.9886986976 57.8364921388 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.481481481 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7037037037 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.67664670659 342% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115625472339 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365464604789 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517120436669 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0680225211049 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473783523875 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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