Violence portrayed on TV and in the movies leads to an increase in crime in our society. People who watch violent movies are more likely to become criminals. Do you agree or disagree?
One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is the colossal upsurge in crime scenes in the movies. There is a wide spread worry that this will only lead to a myriad of concern in the society. In My opinion violence portrayed on the TV and movies has more negative impact than positive in the society.
On the one hand, critics may point out that one of the most significant benefit of such scenes is the entertainment of the audience. For an example, unlike past due to the lack of advanced technological support, now movies and programs have more fighting scenes and the success rate of such programs or movies are much higher than those without it.
On the other hand, there are several arguments in favor of my stance. One of the most preponderant one is that such crime scene has negative consequence for the teenagers in various ways. According to a survey in New York city schools, the juvenile cases has increased 120% than before, and along with that the common reason that was found is, all the adolescences were motivated due to such crime scenes on TV or Movies. Secondly, the eye catchy crime scenes has negatively impacted the social life as the cases of the racism and domestic violence has also increase with a common reason behind it, is the such programs on TV.
Lastly, in my opinion the government and the entertainment industries must take great initiative to prevent the likely hood that people tends to become criminal after watching such programs to have peaceful society.
In the view of the argument outlined above, one can conclude that despite having benefit, the drawback are indeed too dire to ignore.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78947368421 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5073459326 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.2223155276 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.090909091 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192189869873 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703589743927 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733950170513 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100684960408 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673569864943 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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