The question of whether to open or close access to information for different fields such as science, business and academics, is very topical today, as it can benefit those fields in effect. There are valid arguments on both sides, which I will discuss now.
On the one hand, it is often said that researcher should enjoy their rights for information in order to succeed, for instance by building up new knowledge in their researches, which will clearly benefit society. In addition, academic people face a high necessity for data during their activities; if we restrict the accessibility of data them, it will equal to fishing without water. Finally, businesses, as a main booster of economy, are supposed to be provided with current information in order to manage their policies, which will, in turn, lead to the prosperity of community.
On the other hand, releasing of some sensitive information could cause chaos in communities, such as private lives of policymakers. Furthermore, confidential information about army forces or security systems of governmental organizations might result in terroristic attacks or other serious crimes against national security. Lastly, using of general information of ordinary people may be considered as a violation of privacy rights of people. For example, the preferences of people in shopping online usually censored by big companies, aiming to work out profitable products, which is often done without permissions of people thereto.
Overall, I tend to agree that it is wiser to restrict access to information as much as it is required, for reasons which benefit both security and privacy rights of people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether to open or close access to information ...
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Line 3, column 635, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... without permissions of people thereto. Overall, I tend to agree that it is wise...
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Line 4, column 174, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... security and privacy rights of people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, if, lastly, may, so, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1392.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31297709924 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96615722602 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606870229008 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.8770334795 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.2 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161990100993 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659008231268 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0271320187017 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0955400177531 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302317073288 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.