Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People have different views about whether to get a job or continue education after school. While there are some benefits to get a job straight after school, I would argue that it is better to go to a university or college.
The choice to work right after high school can be fascinating for several reasons. Many young people prefer to have their own source of income rather than relying on their parents. The sooner they get a job the sooner they become independent, and they will be able to provide their own house, automobile and start a family. They either might think by getting a job at first; they can acquire the relative skills, and the faster become master at their profession. Consequently progress is more rapid and may lead to earlier promotions and a successful career.
Though for some people who have lower incomes leaving the education is a must and they have to go to work as soon as possible to help in living expenses.
On the other hand I believe that it is more beneficial for students to continue their studies. Firstly, because our brain performance could be improved by educating it and secondly university is where we can take a lot of general and knowledge which lead to a wider perspective and personal developments. Besides, the personal life skills are gained, college coursework prepare the students with better communication skills that are useful for the workplace, for example presentation skills, writing, team working, research skills and analytical thinking. To enter to the universities and then get a degree you should pass many courses and read numerous sources. When they pass many courses and read various sources they get familiar with various subjects so they can find they can discover their passion and interests in that way. Secondly, academic qualifications are required in many occupations. For example it is impossible to become a doctor, judge or lawyer without having the relative degree. Consequently education can help to access more professional works. Finally, the job market becomes more and more competitive, and sometimes there are hundreds of applicants for a job vacancy .young people who don’t have academic degree from a university or college will not be able to compete with other candidates so, being educated to a degree level makes them much more employable. However this doesn’t mean that having a university qualification by self can act as passport to get a job, it should be accompanied by with the pertinent proficiencies for the job.
For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that students are more likely to be successful in their careers if they continue their studies after school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 445.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02247191011 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7795400153 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519101123596 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3668502627 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.631578947 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4210526316 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89473684211 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206038704958 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702626355827 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731317590943 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141625357592 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100652429453 0.0667264976115 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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