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community is one of the most important our section of our life besides our family. Actually our biggere family is our community and every body should take care of that because they can influence each other directly. some people belive that young people need and are involved in their community well these days while others donot think so. Personally, I belive that participating in community affairs is so important but nowadays many youngsters donot show interst to do this. The following reasons will elaborate my point of view.
Firstly, in this surging world which every thing is progress very fast, our juvenile want and push to go with this high speed movement. In this era every family are interested to grow up their children and young based on the contemporary condition. Jouvenile are very busy these days, they try to learn many skills and technic. they have a lot of class work and other educational courses which will accupy their time. it seems that they donot have enough time to do all of them. When ever I compare my teenage time with my brohter, it look like they work as a scientist. they can not afford to assaign any free time to do any entertainment or involve with community afairs.
Second, other reason that I think it should be consider more seriously is that nowadays the interent has brought everything in palm of hand of juvenile. this sense that they can access everything at a glance and evry where only through internet may convince them that they do not need to rely on anything except the internet. If a young people has the internet he or she can spend all his or her day by surfing with a good feeling. they do not pay attention on the social mattere unless they disconect from internet. they have not undresatand the inmportance of community as our parents did. they only want to know aboaut their intereast and their entertainment and only through internet. they think internet is solution for everything. based on this approach, they are not intersted to get involved with older people who they live with a slower pace.
In conclusion, however it has some disadvantages, young people these days spend their whole time with internet and they are not interested to participate to community work and social advent. they can be happy with fast and easy access to their wanting throuhg high speed 5 generation telecommunication systems. it should be broadcasted or tought that nothing can be substitude human comminucation. it needs to promoted more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, so, well, while, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89671361502 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62756493954 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521126760563 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0449067623 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9166666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.5376344086 451% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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