Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is the best way for teachers to help students become more interested in a subject by explaining how this subject can help students live better outside the school.

Submitted by nolo on Mon, 09/02/2019 - 07:37

There are numerous different ways for teachers to learn a particular subject to get students’ attraction in a lesson. One of the vital ways is that teachers try to show the fact of the subject in the world and assist students to think about the subject as a beneficial way to live in a better condition outside the school. I, personally, believe that it is the best learning option for students to get more familiar with their lessons and support my idea with two conspicuous reasons which elaborate as follows.

To begin with, helping students to understand the concept of a subject in reality increase the rate of interest due to the fact that they can easier learn and memorize the subject. In this regard, whenever they forget the details of a subject, reminding the real example helps them to deal with. Therefore, they can learn a lesson much easier than before. An example can drive this notion dramatically home. Imagine that a teacher wants to teach multiplying to their students. The teacher should explain the effect of learning this subject in their students live, such as buying some fruit. Students can buy commodities, without others’ assistant, by learning multiplying, which is interesting for a youth who has never done this before.

Moreover, since the most important role of schools is to prepare students for their future career, increasing their knowledge and interests about a subject, in reality, helps students to find the ideal future job easier. An example can shed some light on this subject. When my ten years old brother went to a chemistry museum, he realized that his ideal job is working as a microbiologist. Therefore, it is the best way to learn a subject is to know its applicability in reality.

All in all, the best way to absorb students’ attraction is that teachers teach them in a way that they can realize the impact of the subject outside the school. I completely agree with this viewpoint and support my idea in the previous paragraphs. I believe that these two remarkable factors are persuasive enough to accept that the mentioned way is the best.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
There are several different ways for teachers to learn a particular...
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Line 3, column 638, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to multiply'.
Suggestion: to multiply
...ts can buy some commodities by learning multiplying, which is interesting for a youth who h...
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Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a youth who has never done this before. Moreover, since the most important role ...
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Line 7, column 366, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ept that the mentioned way is the best.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87818696884 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73151580017 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498583569405 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8377420943 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.294117647 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454104026584 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146177063617 0.076458572812 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872855010661 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287461048713 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426439868771 0.0645574589148 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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