Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil
The author claims that the investment in Consolidated Industries should be increased, because based on several evidence the need of fuel for heating in the next years will increased in the northeastern United States where winter in extremely cold, while this claim is without any strong evidence or proof for a couple reasons described in the following.
To begin with the author arguments that the most homes have used fuel as their major fuel for heating, however the author could not provide enough statistics about the actual percent of resident who use fuel as a primary source. After that this evidence which is supported by author about fuel as a primary source is based on a reliable source or just is an assumption Without any strong evidence. In addition, due to the fact that new homes have built in this place, probably use new technology for heating which the author does not consider this fact and just rely on fuel as a primary source.
Secondly article claims a correlated between growth population and increasing demand for fuels. However, this claim is not appropriately justifying that this growth will happen in which years or what is the population growth rate. Another problem with this claim is that author does not take some push factor for migration into consideration. Since, some factors such as unemployment rate, inclement weather play an important role in the demography of population. Thus, if the situation became worth in the future for people who are living in this place, they definitely will leave this place and will settle in another location.
For aforementioned reasons this argument is flawed, although it could be strengthened if the author provides enough information regarding the main fuel in this place and support this claim based on valuable statistics. Further strengthened would be a clear elaboration about the growth of population based on reasonable evidence, not based on conjecture.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1595 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.032 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.651 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.112 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.642 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some evidence'.
Suggestion: some evidence
...s should be increased, because based on several evidence the need of fuel for heating in the nex...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
...fuel for heating in the next years will increased in the northeastern United States where...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 220, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...his claim based on valuable statistics. Further strengthened would be a clear elaborati...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14195583596 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71667631222 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520504731861 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.9200251527 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.181818182 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8181818182 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09090909091 5.70786347227 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145020164259 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566042260957 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705552906209 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.092859096655 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665533166797 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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