Independent writing TPO 51

First and foremost, movies and television are known as hobbies in lots of cultures. One of the greatest benefits of these media are for children. The media lead children in a way that they could seize knowledge from movies and television. Furthermore, children and young adults via the media can enhance their skills and broaden the horizon. By the right using of television, they would become more creative by the time. For instance, when I was child, I had learned the origami via television programs. Origami is the hobby which shapes the paper into animals. Nowadays when I am nervous, I am doing origami to relax.

The second reason, one should take into account this significant that television and movies could be a tangible source for adults ,particularly the adults who don not have academic education. Television and movies are raised the general information of society by educational and functional programs. On the other hand, the media encourage the people to read and learn. These reasons lead society into golden ages which people are expert in obtaining up to date information. As my father always says, the media especially movies like university which everybody could enhance their knowledge by attending to them. For example, my mother always watches cooking programs and learns new food to the the extend that she always cooks delicious meal for family.

To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples leads us to the conclusion that based upon today's lifestyle. Not only Benefits for children but also raising the knowledge of adults are two main reasons of my statement. Actually there are some other reasons and examples advocate the claim which is not mentioned above. By and large I highly recommend that people at any ages should attend to the advantages of the movies and television.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...es could be a tangible source for adults ,particularly the adults who don not have...
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Line 3, column 691, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...cooking programs and learns new food to the the extend that she always cooks delicious ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 691, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...cooking programs and learns new food to the the extend that she always cooks delicious ...
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Line 3, column 695, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ing programs and learns new food to the the extend that she always cooks delicious meal fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, for example, for instance, by and large, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06312292359 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62785867544 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56146179402 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9030093562 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6666666667 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7222222222 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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