There have appeared endless discussions over children's reward. Parents argue that it is a good idea to offer school-age children cash for high grades. Personally, I strongly approve of this statement.
On one hand, what takes my priority is study efficiency. It is well noted that only by earning money for high grades at school can children feel appreciation for their parents. There is likelihood that children are thankful of their parents for recognizing their hard work at school. Their sense of appreciation is bound to motivate them to work harder, to pour in more effort to earn even better grades in classes. As a result, they stand a golden chance to study harder and learn much more from school. More interestingly, the fact is that money is an effective incentive for everybody, including children. After earning money thanks to high marks, children would certainly long for more. For that reason, it is possible for them to do their best in order to earn more decent grades in exchange more money. Subsequently, children are sure to become better students and enhance their study efficiency. Indeed, awarding school-age children money for their work to get high grades has a tendency to study harder, and therefore study better.
On the other hand, some people might say that awarding naive, irresponsible children money would definitely cause them to spend the cash on harmful purchases, such as too much junk food or video games. As a consequence, this prevents children from performing well academically. However, that is not necessarily the case. In fact, parents award their children money, but do not give them total control of their rewards. They still have a voice in their children's purchases, thus be able to stop them from unhealthy purchases. Furthermore, it is common knowledge that the money earned after earn good results would be used by children for entertaining purchases. For instance, they might spend the money on their favorite books or go to the theater with their friends. It follows that they enjoy themselves immensely afterwards, hence are relaxed and relieved from stress. Accordingly, their minds are cleared, refilled with creativity and hunger for knowledge. Consequently, they are bound to augment their academic performance and capability. By and large, the claim that money reward for high scoring kids prevents worsens academic performance is intrinsically false.
In summary, sense of appreciation, incentive to work harder and a relaxed mind are convincing reasons for my approval. It is highly recommended that parents should take my writing into detailed consideration to make an appropriate decision on children's reward.
- TPO 30 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours Use spec 76
- TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 73
- TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task 71
- TPO 41 - integrated writing 88
- TPO 30 Integrated Writing Task 80
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as to, for instance, in fact, in summary, such as, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25407925408 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81068042889 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522144522145 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9096171264 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6923076923 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0669396338547 0.236089414692 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243733559081 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0274200646971 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0381778176906 0.150856017488 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187483922695 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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