During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about A possible job in one of his restaurants. 
Write a letter to this businessman. In your l

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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about 

A possible job in one of his restaurants. 




Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter 

* remind him when and where you met 

* Tell him what kind of job you are interested in 

* Say why you think you would be suitable for a job 

Write at least 150 words. Begin your letter as dear... 

Submitted by Blandine on Sat, 09/28/2019 - 03:55

dear sir

I am writing to you about the job application in one of your restaurant as a waitress.

we met in the plan on the 3rd of March 2019 in the flight was going to new york as you had a business meeting in new jersey. during that trip, you mentioned that Stellenbosch branch is in need of waiters

I would like to apply for a waitress place in your restaurant in Stellenbosch as a part-time job that will help me with the pocket-money to buy stationaries, I am a 3rd-year student in nursing.

I am hard-working and very fast to learn, I worked in one of the 5-star restaurant at cape town hotel and have 3 years experience in this profession. sometimes I helped in the booking of tables at the restaurant when the hostess fell sick on duty or absent . I learned to place orders in different companies for supplies in the restaurant.

hope to hear from you soon.

yours faithfully,

Blandi Mansakala

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Dear
dear sir I am writing to you about the ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
... of your restaurant as a waitress. we met in the plan on the 3rd of March 201...
^^
Line 9, column 126, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: During
...u had a business meeting in new jersey. during that trip, you mentioned that Stellenbo...
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Line 17, column 152, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sometimes
...3 years experience in this profession. sometimes I helped in the booking of tables at th...
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Line 17, column 258, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... the hostess fell sick on duty or absent . I learned to place orders in different ...
^^
Line 21, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hope
...es for supplies in the restaurant. hope to hear from you soon. yours fa...
^^^^
Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yours
... hope to hear from you soon. yours faithfully, Blandi Mansakala...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 781.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 166.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70481927711 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87980999449 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626506024096 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 218.7 290.88556701 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.1209920897 44.8134815571 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.625 76.5299724578 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 4.34317383033 17% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156298177726 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690322088591 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681096590098 0.0603063233224 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105756096117 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.081839892846 0.0580467560999 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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