“In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.”
In our new modern world where we live in, the role of a well-established occupation for having a prosperous life is undeniable. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely disagree with the assertion. It's my strong belief that a reliable job is convenient for people for two main reasons, which I will develop in subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, in today's turbulent economic situation, risky decision-making in our business can lead to bankruptcy, so people must be careful about their choices even if they are not in a well-paid position. To be more specific, if we face failure as a result of our perilous planning, starting from scratch is almost impossible. Take Ali Mardani, my friend, as an example. About 5 years ago, he had a reliable post, but very long working hours per day. Although he did not have financial support, he decided to resign. Eventually, after 5 months, he could not bear his expenses, so he had to move to a new company in a worse situation. This example demonstrates how making a hazardous decision in our new era, will lead to a big challenge in our lives.
Furthermore, trustworthy work will lessen the stress of our lives, though it does not have enough salaries because you can rest assured that you will not face economic austerity after spending your income. To give a vivid picture of this idea, if you have a fixed monthly wage, you can balance your budget and expenditures, so you will have enough money for the whole year. Conversely, if you decide to have a career without a constant rate of salary, you are always in the stress of how to handle your budget in the long run.
In light of the above-mentioned reasons and examples, making high-risk decisions and quickly working is not beneficial in our modern world. In this case, you will have much stress and you may encounter insolvency.
- “In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.” 76
- A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys 23
- Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and suppo 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...definitely disagree with the assertion. Its my strong belief that a reliable job is...
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...ill develop in subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, in todays turbulent econo...
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...ead to a big challenge in our lives. Furthermore, trustworthy work will lesse...
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...o handle your budget in the long run. In light of the above-mentioned reasons ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, furthermore, if, may, so, well, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76323987539 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84007946678 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598130841121 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3872931866 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.933333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0941624695705 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336136483377 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554022762172 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0683154339106 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538599913271 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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