do you think that television programs,movies and video games influence young people's behavior?
Television programs,movies and video games apart from entertainment ,it influences young people's behavior also.
Firstly,I would say that childrens have limited their imagination to these programs.For example:movies like Batman and Superman have limited their brain to these heroes and types but not other than these.
Furthermore,children become addicted to these television shows and leave studies,as they are so much engrossed in it.For example:children bunk their classes of school for the episode of Doreamon because they are engaging and exciting for them.In addition,there many voilent shows comming on television,so we should have eye on our kids what they are watching.Children may be watching some18plus content on television which will crave them do masturbation lead to severe consequences in their life.Even sometimes children imitate just like their favourate heroes which come on television.For example:news came on night that a child imitating just like superman tried to jump from a building ,got injuries.As,he fall down from the building.These television programs makes us lethargic and mentally unstable by brain.So,people should go gyms and parks to play outdoor sports rather watching television , movies and playing video games.But there are some positive aspects of them also for instance:many movies are made on history of a country, how it got freedom?.This incalcates patriotic behaviour in children towards their country.Some movies breaks the social taboos in society for example:all citizens in a country should be given equal rights irrespective of their creed,caste and sex.This will generate a egalitarinism in children.Another movies are made on uniques ideas like young Enterpreneurs get different idea which made him billionaire
At the end,some people say that programs,movies and video games influence young people's behaviour,others say that these things do not make impact on the minds of young generation's behaviour.But ,in my opinion i will say that television,video games and movies are the key or major manipulator young people's behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, apart from, even so, for example, for instance, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82736156352 4.8611393121 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.50498253882 2.67179642975 131% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635179153094 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 20.6003584229 15% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 102.0 20.1344086022 507% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 761.087380003 48.9658058833 1554% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 596.333333333 100.406767564 594% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 102.333333333 20.6045352989 497% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 42.3333333333 5.45110844103 777% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 42.0 5.5376344086 758% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280691359775 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.26332442987 0.076458572812 344% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.186955308793 0.0737576698707 253% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26230696056 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.191907419759 0.0645574589148 297% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 57.2 11.7677419355 486% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -48.97 58.1214874552 -84% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 22.1 6.10430107527 362% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 45.4 10.1575268817 447% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.72 10.9000537634 163% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 13.48 8.01818996416 168% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 10.002688172 205% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 42.8 10.0537634409 426% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 21.0 10.247311828 205% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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