Paleo diets, in which one eats how early hominids (human ancestors) did, are becoming increasingly popular. Proponents claim our bodies evolved to eat these types of food, especially bone broth, a soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. They believe it has many health-promoting nutrients, such as cartilage, which can heal our joints, and chondroitin, which promotes nerve regeneration. Skeptics point out that ingested cartilage can’t replenish cartilage in your knees or elbows and ingested chondroitin doesn’t make our brains any healthier. Yet, there is strong anecdotal evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don’t. Therefore, ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we don’t, and that by emulating the way they ate, we can cure many chronic illnesses.
The argument claims that paleo diets are becoming very popular these days as they can cure many chronic illnesses. stated in this way the argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on the assumptions, for which there is no evidence. hence, the argument is weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily assumes that the champions of the paleo diet claims that the human bodies evolved by following this diet. Since, they belive that this type of diet provides many health-promoting nutrients. this statement is a stretch and is not substantiated in any way. For example, people who do not follow this diet also include bone broth in their regular diets, but still facing the issues with the joints such as knees and elbows. Clearly, it is not only for people who follow Pale diets that can have chondrotin, but normal people will also have chondrotin. hence, it is not chondrotin that makes the difference. The argument could be much clearer, if it explicitly mentions how exactly paleo diets are providing exclusive health benefits, while other diets cannot.
Second, the argument claims that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases that those who don't. this is again very weak and unconvincing, as the argument does not provide any correlation between bone broth and metabolic, inflammatory diseases. To illustrate, the bone broth could have some nutrients which helps in preventing the metabolic and inflammatory disesases. while, the argument did not mention any such correlation and stated as and anecdotal evidence. if the argument could have mentioned the effects of bone broth on the mentioned types of diseases, then the argument would be lot more convincing.
Finally, the argument concludes that if we follow the eating habits of ancient humans, we could cure many chronic illnesses. The argument did not provided enough evidence on how exactly following ancient eating habits will cure chronic illnesses. The argument also claims that ancient humans know about the human physiology that we do not. The author should give more examples and evidences to support this claim as what exact aspects are the modren day humans lacking in the human physiology understanding. Without convincing answers to the above questions, one is left with an impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than a substansive evidence.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. The argument could be considerebly strengthened, if the author mentions all the relevent factors associated with the paleo diets. In order to assess the merits of a particular situation, it is essential to have full knowledge of all the contributing factors.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 460 350
No. of Characters: 2338 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.631 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.083 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.707 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.17 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Stated
...s they can cure many chronic illnesses. stated in this way the argument fails to menti...
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Suggestion: Hence
...ptions, for which there is no evidence. hence, the argument is weak, unconvincing and...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... bodies evolved by following this diet. Since, they belive that this type of diet pro...
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Suggestion: This
...ovides many health-promoting nutrients. this statement is a stretch and is not subst...
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Suggestion: Hence
...ormal people will also have chondrotin. hence, it is not chondrotin that makes the di...
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Suggestion: don't
...nd inflammatory diseases that those who dont. this is again very weak and unconvinci...
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...lammatory diseases that those who dont. this is again very weak and unconvincing, as...
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Suggestion: If
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Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...chronic illnesses. The argument did not provided enough evidence on how exactly followin...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ut the human physiology that we do not. The author should give more examples and ev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2423.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 459.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2788671024 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76909489191 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4018532716 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.958333333 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184369107684 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552588065795 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362601869284 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101223813932 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324423485201 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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