Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to improve public transportation.
Nowadays, governments have different tasks that they have to concern about. From public transportation to internet accessibility, authorities should demonstrate plans for these aspects. Many people assert that since we live in the information era, the internet is way more crucial than public transportation while others believe otherwise. As far as I am concerned, the second group's idea is superior to the first one.
First of all, if people cannot travel through the city or between cities, how could they manage their lives? Of course, the internet is very useful, but transportation is a vital part of society due to the need for transportation. For example, imagine you were accepted to a university in a city which contains speedy internet services but has a lack of proper transportation. You submitted classes through the net but when you wanted to participate in those classes, you could not reach the university on time because of the weak transport system. And it is not just restricted to this area, if you wanted to purchase some necessary products, you could not reach downtown so easily since the reason mentioned before.
Last but not the least, the internet is just like the transport system in the virtual world; therefore, it is not wise to abandon the real world in order to achieve the artificial one. What I mean is simple, people should concentrate on reality which is their true life whereas the net which does not exist in reality should not become the major concern. In order to do so, the government should invest more in public transportation and all of real aspects of society members than wasteful concentration on artificial services.
All in all, the officials' investment in public transportation is not only a duty for them but also is a necessity for citizens' lives. so, in my opinion, vast investment on the internet is both a waste of money and harmful for society, hence the government should tighten its budget for the important aspects of people's lives.
- Some people that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. 83
- ETS first writing exam 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to improve public transportation. 70
- agree or disagree? Television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed 70
- tpo 49 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'groups'' or 'group's'?
Suggestion: groups'; group's
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Line 7, column 17, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'officials'' or 'official's'?
Suggestion: officials'; official's
... artificial services. All in all, the officials investment in public transportation is ...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...also is a necessity for citizens lives. so, in my opinion, vast investment on the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, i mean, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99700598802 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88112482815 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547904191617 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6297665283 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.214285714 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20834791283 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705097264847 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510076347175 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122829519544 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272662618282 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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