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In the contemporary era, people strive to get a degree from the university and access a good job. In this regard, some of them continue their studying to a high level of education and others start their work and vocation as soon as possible. while some may cling to the idea that they should get a degree faster in order to get a job quickly, I am of the opinion that it is more beneficial for people such as my friend to study more years for getting a high degree and gain a better job in the future. There are several rationales behind this point of view, two of which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, individuals with more knowledge and experience which they gain in universities could manage their work better in their job, and consequently, they will have high productivity. To be more specifically the more ones learn information and data in his or her field of study, the more he or she become up to date, and the better he has performance in his future job. For instance, a biologist who has worked for three years in the university laboratory, compared with a person who has worked for one year at the same place, has more experience and information. thus, when she will be hired in a laboratory, she can work on projects better and she will exploit more state-of-the-art methods and equipment which were used in the university and she learned how to utilize them in her work to access faster and excellent data and outcome.
Moreover, a well-educated person gets more self-confidence and self-esteem in his work, and in the interview with companies, he can convince the interviewer to get the job. In other words, people with a high degree could answer questions as well as possible in the interview, and make good affecting on the manager of a company to hire them. therefore, they could access a vocation easier and faster compared with persons who study lower than them in the university or college. According to recent observational studies conducted on job opportunity and hiring, revealed that people with higher degrees have a better interview because of their vast knowledge in their field. Hence, they have lower stress and anxiety while they talk about their experience and capacity, and so, they create a friendly atmosphere where they meet the interviewer. this approach has a positive effect on the interviewer’s decision and most of the time the company hires such persons as soon as possible. therefore, individuals with more information access a better job and faster.
In short, considering the reasons above, it can be concluded that people with more years of study have more opportunities for a job. thus, they become prosperous in their vocation. Not only do they have high productivity in their job, but they also boost their self-confidence to have a better interview.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in short, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2336.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97021276596 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90374946885 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459574468085 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 736.2 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.178721968 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.777777778 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1111111111 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0977827739569 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411896772393 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783637008822 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0742275892533 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842670255426 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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