Society should prepare young people with cooperation, not competition.
Becoming a leader in today's society can be brutal. In school, young people spend countless hours on school, internships, and jobs in order to garner leadership skills that may reward them with lucrative careers in the future. These careers, some believe, would be more easily attainable in a society without as much stringent competition. This conception, however, is flawed, ignoring the benefits of competition in the growth of youths for two distinct reasons. First, competition is extremely important for young minds as it prepares them for the real world. Leadership positions in fields such like government, industry, finance, and education are not easy to attain, and people spend many years refining themselves and their work in order to begin their careers. Even after this training, after the prestigious programs that many well-qualified individuals attend, many individuals still struggle to find a job position that suites them. Through rigorous training, only the most competitive people are able to aquire these top-teir jobs and to work well under their stressful conditions. Because of the amount of competition in the real world, society must train young people to thrive under similarly stressful, competitive conditions. Furthermore, competition allows people to showcase themselves in the best way possible, and perhaps even find themselves. No human is perfect, and everyone has flaws. People well-versed in competition know this, and know how to best present themselves in order to mitigate the effect of these flaws on their perception. For example, top football teams like the New England Patriot's have their weaknesses, but their strongsuits (notably, players like Tom Brady and Rob Gronkowski) are able to hide these weaknesses so that the team seems virtually infallible. Extrapolating this same mindset to the individual, being able to recognize one's flaws and move past them, bolstering their own weak spots with their strengths, is something that can only be learned through competition. Finally, while it is true that cooperation has a place in the education and training of young people, and it should be integrated into the structure of these same systems, it it does not compare to the benefits of a competitive environment. It is without question that society is unequitable between different groups of people, and this inequity should be addressed, however, past this, competition is more helpful to start careers in the first place. Cooperation is a skill that is vital to people in leadership roles, but it is vital for them to execute their roles effectively. On the other hand, competition is vital for them to attain the roles in the first place. Though cooperation is an important skill for young people to learn, it should exist within a competitive environment. There is clear validity to the mindset that cooperation allows youths to grow and develop productively, however, this mindset ignores the fact that in the adult world, not everyone gets a trophy. In order to be the best selves the can be, society's structure should mimic that of a flousishing economy: heavy competition, where the best product, business, and individuals rise to the top.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, well, while, for example, it is true, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2684.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 509.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27308447937 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88517695908 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495088408644 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2332510191 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.80952381 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2380952381 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09523809524 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.97078651685 20% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21093154911 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621832410919 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517867369229 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21093154911 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.