“In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The Mayor of Hillview is proposing to the City Council that they start a campaign to convince Autotech to build a car manufacturing company in the Hillview lot, and that they offer the company "significant tax incentives" in order to incentivise the campaign. The Mayor argues that this will be able to decrease unemployment in Hillview, providing jobs for the many individuals who lost their jobs last year when Computech closed. This suggestion has the potential to reduce the economic crisis in Hillview, the Mayor makes three assumptions in his memo that need to be addressed before this campaign is considered. In addition to this, more information is needed about the city of Hillview and its economic need.
First, the Mayor assumes that the reisdents of Hillview who lost their jobs lasy year are qualified to work in the auto-industry. The Mayor suggests that residents of the city who worked in computer software programming will be able to work in Autotech's new building as staff. This assumption lacks vital evidence needed before the City Council makes their decision. If the residents of Hillview have not recieved the necessary training in manufacturing, Autotech's new manufacturing plant will likely go out of business, creating a great economic burden for the city. Residents of the city must be qualified in industry work in order for this campaign to be lucrative, and the Mayor has not yet done enough research on this matter.
Furthermore, the Mayor assumes that the city's economic system will be able to function after giving Autotech "significant tax incentives," which are not explicitly made clear. These tax incentives, likely tax breaks to the company, would allow the company to gain extreme amounts of revenue without contributing to the town that the manufacturing plant is based. As a result of this, the town would likely suffer greatly, and would not be able to provide the infrastructure needed to keep the manufacturing plant operable. The Mayor needs to demonstrate that these economic incentives to Autotech will not harm the financial integrity of the city before this proposal is considered.
Finally, the Mayor assumes that Autotech needs to build a new manufacturing plant, and that it will be economically lucrative in the long run. It is possible that Autotech is outsourcing manufacturing outside of the country because of the financial benefit, and that the company is in need of another manufacturing plant. This assumption also includes the caveat that the city may not be suitable for industry at all. Computech closed for a reason, and if the Mayor must explain this reason in his proposal to ensure that Autotech will not fall into the same issues that it did when it operated in Hillview. Until this evidence is suggested, the City Council should spend more time looking into different city-wide needs.
While this proposal could be extremely profitable to the town, generating jobs, lowering unemployment, and generating the city much-needed revenue, more information is needed before it is considered. The Mayor must address these assumptions and consider them before proposing the campaign to the City Council, as more information is needed before they can make a decision. Without adjustments made to the recommendation, stakeholders in the town of Hillview should not consider this recommendation. It is far too risky for them, and more evidence is needed for them to make a decision.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 559 350
No. of Characters: 2829 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.862 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.061 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.847 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 157 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 128 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.847 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.409 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 142, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...utotech 'significant tax incentives,' which are not explicitly made clear. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, while, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2922.0 2260.96107784 129% => OK
No of words: 559.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22719141324 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04469434032 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4114490161 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 910.8 705.55239521 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.67365269461 478% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4828027182 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.818181818 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4090909091 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201930911525 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739237762597 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367138987585 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13486782238 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328527068671 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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