Agree or disagree
Improving health care, education and pensions needs to be addressed most urgently in Chile
One of the most important complications of any politician, is to decide in which order to put needs of the population in a hierarchy, and what criteria must be used to order the problems of any members of one community. In my opinion, the complications that have to be in the top of the list are related with survival and quality of life, and those ones have direct relationship with education, pensions and health care, whose reality in Chile is quite precarious and I am going to describe it.
Basic services aren´t the best in Chile, being precarious to the people who use them, and this situation should not be like that. The republic has one of the worst public educational and medical management in Latin-American, and they directly result in an unhealthy quality of life for Chileans. There are a lack of professionals, bad facilities and the assistance of the institutions of the government are worse in comparison with particulars. That is the first reason that I thought hospitals, schools and everything that is associated with them have to be a priority, because a big percentage of the nation lives without enough benefits to be considered a good well-being as a result of this situation. The reality of Chile is reaffirmed by different research which give critic numbers. For example, an investigation revealed by Bio Bio radio indicates that an a half of the population earn less than four hundred thousand pesos and the minimum quantity to be recognized to survive is four hundred and fifty thousand pesos, and this amount doesn’t consider factors such as a college, or abnormal events (such as an emergency), thus they be bound to demand public benefits to attend their needs and emergencies (they), which are not enough to cover the demands of the population. A society in these conditions is not worthy, the issue of the quality of live must be changed.
Another urgent dilemma is the salary of retired workers, which is unsustainable to live product of the pension legislation, and it must to be different because it has affiliation with the subsidy of elderly. The main problem is that big companies are owners of the structure of distribution, hence they are interested obtaining cash instead of administrating finances with the focus of obtaining the best way to deliver decent benefits. And sadness statistics affirms this is a focal point, which it can be seen by the big profits that pension plan company earn in contrast with the poor dividend that the people attain. I believe that this situation doesn’t have to happen, people who have been working their entire life, in a time that it is supposed to be to relax and enjoy their last days, and instead, they are doomed to continue working because the income that they receive isn´t enough to keep a respectable life style. There are a big number of retire citizens with problem with their medication, sickness and life styles. Indeed, Chile has a big scale of depression into old men and women, derive of their routine situation. Poverty is totally inconceivable, but even more so in those who cannot work. Therefore, that situation should to be changed, is a priority.
Summarizing, I believe that health, education and pensions are the most urgent topics to consider as a priority because are correlated with the maintenance of the individuals. Adding, if in case are problems are solved, the protests are going to decrease. Don’t forget, every change involves time, thus we have to have some patient to see a new and better country
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| 2019-12-29 | Gillian Ord | 73 | view |
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- Which of these forms of protest make the most impact: •Going on strike•Participating in marches•Disseminating information through social media 76
- Some people believe that Improving health care, education and pensions is the most urgent, while others believe that electing a constitutional assembly is more important. Which option do you prefer? 70
- Which of these forms of protest make the most impact:•Going on strike•Participating in marches•Disseminating information through social media 70
- Some people believe that electing a constitutional assembly is the best way to address modifications to the constitution, while others believe that a group of experts should be responsible for this task. 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in contrast, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 15.1003584229 278% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2956.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 597.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95142378559 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88176046467 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497487437186 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 948.6 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.831773038 48.9658058833 208% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 147.8 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.85 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197903625598 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571886209918 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577729354039 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127012200607 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300935870897 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 86.8835125448 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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