The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand andGermany in 1980 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and

Germany in 1980 and 2010.

The charts compare the units of electricity produced in New Zealand and Germany in 1980

and 2010 from 5 fuel sources.

Overall, more units of electricity were produced in 2010 than in 1980 in both countries. In

2010, most electricity was produced by nuclear power in Germany and by coal in New

Zealand.

In 1980, coal was the main source of electricity in New Zealand. It produced 56 units, which

was twice the figure for Germany. Natural gas and hydro each accounted for 30 units in

New Zealand, with 11 units for coal. In contrast, in Germany, the figures for natural gas,

nuclear and hydro power were 28 units, 20 units and only 7 units respectively.

There were 2 main sources of electricity production in New Zealand in 2010, coal [150 units]

and hydro [46 units]. Nuclear power was used to generate 155 units in Germany. Although

the figure for natural gas fell to only 2 units, coal [28 units] and petroleum [27 units]

remained significant.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 815.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90963855422 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54280383774 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487951807229 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.378210705 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.9 5.23603664747 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 12.0 3.83414634146 313% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236229007968 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138144817582 0.103423049105 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12592555633 0.0843802449381 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11509417767 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114276676595 0.0819641961636 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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