Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author goes on stating that the woven baskets are local and unique only to nearby places around the prehistoric village of Palea. The author claims that these woven baskets are made only by the Palean people. But a recent discovery of a Palean basket has been made in an ancient village Lithos, which is on the other side of the river. Due to the broadness, depth of this river and lack of boats with Paleans author assumes that these baskets are not unique to village of Palea. The author here does not make a cogent case and relying on claim that Palean didn’t have ways to cross the river or to trade their goods across the river is inherently flawed.
Firstly, the author’s claim of Paleans not having boats may be true. Based on this assumption, there are variety of factors which might have led to basket falling in hands of Lithos villagers, one such factor may have been Barter System. In prehistoric times, there wasn’t any currency they predominantly relied on exchange of goods of the same value. Here, the Palean basket might have been a part of a barter transaction. These exchange or trade of goods take place with the help of nomadic merchants, traders or travellers who might have an ability to transport goods across the river. There may be chances that Lithos had access to boats and were frequent visitors to their neighbouring village – Palea.
Secondly, the author’s claim of river being broad and deep and boat as the only transportation across the river is flawed as there are many reasons to debunk these assumptions. One such reason is the river might not have been broad or deep as stated by the author. The river must have gone through a steady change over the years there is a likelihood of river being dried up which gave both villages on the opposite sides an opportunity to travel by foot. He also assumes boat as the only reason backing his argument of basket’s origin and uniqueness. There might have been a bridge which the archaeologists are still not aware of and led to transport of goods between both villages.
In conclusion, the author relying on discovery of a “Palean” doesn’t disprove its uniqueness. He had overlooked certain facts such as the trade relations between the two villages and the possibility of existing transport facilities. Had he considered the findings of more archaeologists on this issue or the probability of finding the articles to places beyond Lithos and Palea, the argument would have been far more persuasive.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 432 350
No. of Characters: 2014 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.559 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.662 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.429 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.048 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 51, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91395348837 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70923345556 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458139534884 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8070016814 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.210526316 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6315789474 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258405093028 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990232729433 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670592047744 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168744792459 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653347388232 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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