TPO 52Do you agree or disagree The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict

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TPO 52Do you agree or disagree?The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.

I disagree with the given statement. Allow me to explain why I think in this way.

First of all, one of the most important things for young people is not to be violent adults. And I think the rules that societies today expect young people to follow are not too strict. this is because the rules can lead young people to become an adult who do not use violence. to be more specific, the young people can not know whether some action is exactly right or not. in this case, the rules can teach them what is right activity in a specific occasion. let me give you an example to illustrate my point. a friend of mine, named Kevin is a good example of this. he often got caught while doing drugs on the street and even hit one of his classmates with a bat. eventually he got a two-month suspension. after the suspension, he realized the violence, such as hitting his friends with a bat is not appropriate. as a result, he never uses violence. in this regard, the regulation can encourage young people not to do bad thing.

Another and equally important thing for young people is to be an adult who are fit in the society. And I think the rules that societies today expect young people to follow are not too strict. this is because the rules can help young people to be fit in the society. this is important becasue an individual who does not fit in the society is more likely to be excluded from a community that provides all kinds of useful information and knowledge. let me give you an example to illustrate my point. Korea, where i was born and live now was an extremely poor country at the time of the Korean war that broke out in 1950, but it has rapidly developed over the last few decades. in the process, the competition become fiercer, so most people in the country these days work hard until late at night to survive in the competitive world. in this case, most people would not want to share useful information for surviving, because others are just their rivals. as a result, becoming sociable person is very important in surviving these days. in this situation, a person who do not follow the regulation can not be get a good impression from others.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, while, i think, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45591939547 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42627199728 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486146095718 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0448237784 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.7083333333 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5416666667 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91666666667 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246822803372 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878148435013 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157907239142 0.0737576698707 214% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152040252892 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0790180554105 0.0645574589148 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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