Children can learn effectively from watching TV. Therefore, they should be encouraged to watch TV regularly both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Children can learn effectively from watching TV. Therefore, they should be encouraged to watch TV regularly both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Given that watching TV is an effective channel for children to acquire knowledge, children as the audiences and learners should be encouraged to watch TV no matter they are at home or at school. However, I disagree with such statement.

One of the causes of the disapproval is that it exerts negative influence on children’s health. Directly, facing TV screens regularly will give them poor eyesight which is difficult to cure, no matter they are at school or at home. Another healthy problems result from watching TV regularly is obesity, in particular at home. Considering they are accustomed to lying on sofa with indispensible snacks like chocolate、crisps when they are watching TV at home, their weight is easy to gain.

Apart from health, I hold that it also begets unexpected downsides on their study. Although children could expand the scope of knowledge through watching different contents of programs, the knowledge they acquire on TV is irrelevant to their curriculum and exams. It means it cannot help children make progress and get great grades in study, but distracts them in class. In addition, unlike in school, children without enough supervision and adequate self-discipline at home, leading them to extend the time of watching TV originally set. Gradually, addition to screen might be developed, alluring them to be immersed in TV program and neglect study.

In conclusion, it is a strange encouragement, and from what I have discussed, I see no reason behind to encourage them to watch.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, apart from, in addition, in conclusion, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1283.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 246.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21544715447 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00665751696 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605691056911 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 378.9 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3403840418 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.916666667 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.484467506184 0.244688304435 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163415484315 0.084324248473 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132025101635 0.0667982634062 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301000467244 0.151304729494 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127247881038 0.056905535591 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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