Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Juvenile delinquency has been becoming an ever-increasing concern in modern society. Consequently, some people opine those teenagers who have offended seriously deserve punishment in the same way as adults. Personally, I firmly oppose this view because a completely identical penalty is normally unnecessary despite the need for a more lenient one.
On the one hand, a proper penalty for every offence, minor or serious, is critically important for criminals, victims and every citizen. First, it is appealing to victims because, to some extent, they need a kind of revenge after suffering a lot. Second, although it may sound contradictory that punishment is beneficial to offenders themselves, actually, a tiny penalty in time usually prevents them from committing heinous crimes, in other words, saving their life eventually. Third, everyone can benefit from a lower crime rate, and all appropriate sorts of retribution can work as a deterrent, warning those potential offenders about up-coming consequences of committing a crime.
On the other hand, separate situations between youngsters and adults determine distinct sentences, normally lighter, even though they had the same criminal behaviour as adults. Initially, many teenagers commit crimes because they may not realize what kinds of behaviour are offences in law for the lack of thorough education about preserving students from offending. Similarly, another exclusive reason for young criminals is the immature mind, and those reasons will be eradicated during maturation through suitable education and life experience. Finally, comparing to an adult criminal, it is relatively easier for the rehabilitation of a youth offender because however violent offences they committed, with an alternative form of punishment or a lighter sentence, there would be a much higher possibility for them to develop right moral values and compensate local communities for their guilt.
On balance, although it is inevitable that teenagers offenders should also be punished, different measures must be applied for the separate situations between juveniles and adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, second, similarly, so, third, kind of, in other words, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71835443038 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.000378855 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658227848101 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.0699860417 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.583333333 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1666666667 5.45110844103 242% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 11.8709677419 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168688985195 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563074697179 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498721057276 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0951600490456 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016277638129 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 58.1214874552 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 10.9000537634 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.57 8.01818996416 132% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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